All Comments on 'At the Truck Stop'

Well written. A little bit fantastical but it follows in a reasonable order. This one deserves another few chqpters. Go for it!

Ignore the idiot. Trolls like that are why I no longer post stories here. He probably beat off to it wishing for his male lover to impale is his ass. You KNOW what the stories are about and the trolls continue to post junk.

What tense are you writing in? From your first paragraph "Ashley WAS feeling ... She IS dressed, ". And your second sentence isn't even a sentence.

Sorry guys ... I seem to have a challenge when it comes to tenses ... gives me tension too ...

Enjoy the story though ... and I'd not get an editor as this is just a hobby.

To those who posted comments, thanks a lot! Will try to improve and write better. All in all, have fun!

I very much enjoyed this. Have to be honest, I wasn't concentrating at all on the tenses lol. I'd sure like to be that girl!

different from what i usually read but it was hot and truthfully would go for something like that it made me really wet and horny

esp when the blk guy entered , need more blk action

i want to know where that trucker is with the nude on his door

it is obvious i need to look around truck stops more often for sure

maybe find a few black studs to play with , been since high school since i had a good gang bang

This story, while a bit lengthy, was pretty hot! It worked for me! ;) for all the naysayers, calm the fuck down. It's a story...if u r reading to be a critic, find another site...people don't read these to critique the grammar anyway!

I liked this story but the word ointment just popped up a few times which was a major turn off lol

Weird word to use, ointment conjured up images of nasty diseases lol!!

Otherwise story was fun to read even if it didn't get me off

Will stick to oils or creams and such instead of conjuring up those nasty images for some folks. Hahaha.

To the rest, thanks again for your comments. I'm writing another story with Ashley and lots of black guys. Still have challenges with the tenses ... hahaha ... hope it won't be too hard to read when is done ...