All Comments on 'Audition'

fucked up nigger fantasy.

The sex was ok, but could have been better timed. It moved too quick from foreplay to sex and wasn't very descriptive about the feeling (orgasms, ect.) Also I was caught by the line "Byron told her she had herself figure. Cathy said thanks, wore her clothes back on and returned to her chair just when her boyfriend inquired as to what sort of feature she would be in." I think you could do better with some kind of editor to proof your work.

Hope she ditched her boyfriend first

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hard work and so much imagination, completly new with lots of ideas, wow

Was a great idea, but your really rushed. DFo more build up and detail next time.

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Very much in line with real life-like situations, good reading to say the least.

And then what?

gave it a three, just. Juvenile writing don't think English is the authors first language

Not bad.

Not your best work but I still enjoyed it and love the main premise behind the story.