All Comments on 'Aunt Gets by Cum During Road Trip'
by john5730
- 16 Comments
Anonymous9 months agoWow, that was painful to get through, it's so poorly written. Get a better hobby
Anonymous9 months ago"More to cum on Part 2".
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No chapter # in the title to warn this wasn't a complete story before opening it ALWAYS earns an automatic rating of 1.
Anonymous9 months agoThis is just pathetic. Poor grammar. Poor writing. And very painful to read couldn’t get past the morning scene
Anonymous9 months ago"So, you had a build up of semen, and, in our prior discussions, you mentioned hyperspermia. " No, no there was no mention of this before. And if the character knew to mention this, they wouldn't go to the hospital as it has clearly already been diagnosed. (Which was kind of far fetched anyway.)
Overall the story just suffers from a lot of writing story issues. The character is also completely unlikeable. The aunt seems fine, the main character is the ass. "...had something happen..." This reads like you don't know but are just trying to fill in some blank but it also comes on the heels of mentioning nothing bad has happened...except the family lost all their money and her parents died. That's not exactly nothing.
"runs a series of tests," "asks a series of questions," clearly you are just trying to get something out of the way but have no idea what or how to actually get through that.
But the unlikable main character sexually assaulting the aunt is just crap.
Anonymous9 months agoThey’re definitely a story here, but it was honestly torture to finish. The writing is terrible.
Anonymous9 months agoStop with the mean comments,
It was good keep writing just the end part could have been written with a bit more thought and effort.
Otherwise the storyline is great.
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