All Comments on 'Aunt Kim'

Truly Awful

Now that I've read your writing I have one piece of advice...DONT GIVE UP YOUR DAY JOB !

This has potential, but it needs help. There is so much back story missing in this first part that it is difficult to read.

Who is Laura and what is her role? How did they come to be together?

How did he meet kim and her daughters?

What happened between him and his family?

You need a prequel with all of these threads hanging loose.

Traveller

But it has great potential... It needs a lot of the little gaps filled in, as well as a good editor... Still gave you a 75 on it...