All Comments on 'Aunt Raven: The Story Of Jenny Ch. 02'

You write very well - both the erotic and the prose alone. The continuity between parts of the story is excellent. Keep up the good work!

The depth of the characters is excellent. I feel that John being celebite for two years and during Claire's last days he starts screwing everything in site doesn't work with the nice guy he was protraied to be in "Aunt Raven", but that is just me.

keep them coming no pun intended just great

Hoping for a return of the next chapter of Raven soon and I hope it wont be for long ...

Nice work, I love it!

You write quite well. You show depth to your characters, and show much description (Show don't tell). I am, however going to give a little criticism. I hope you don't mind (Otherwise, feel free to ignore it). First off, you often use loving as a physical, or concrete action (I.E. "He was loving her as a man should his woman). Loving is an emotion or in some cases an abstract action. Making love, however, is a concrete action; and I am sure you know that by typical views making love is generally slow and tender. Finally, Double quotation marks (") are for dialect (people speaking), and Single quotation marks (') are for thoughts. Anyways, I apologize for the rambling, disorganized length.

amazing..hit me up at sorrowfulwings@yahoo.com

It's "innocence", as in he took her innocence -- NOT "innocent's", as in the massacre of the innocents.

JENNY IS CRAZY FOR HER DADDYS COCK AND SHE WILL GET IT.

GOOD SERIES SO FAR

RON TEXAS COWBOYRIDECC@YAHOO.COM

THIS IS A MUCH NEEDED BACKGROUND STORY OF JENNY. THIS LETS YOU SEE INTO HER HEAD WHICH DIRECTION SHE'S HEADING DOWN THE ROAD OF HER LIFE AND HOW JEALOUSY CAN SCREW IT UP. SHE WAS MEAN AND VINDICTIVE EVEN WHEN SHE WAS YOUNG. GREAT STORY.

Great story. Turned the next page but, alas no more. We need to see the follow up with Clair.