by unlucky266
Well written and well paced, it brought blood into my stiffening rod. Thanks!
Very nice, i think that there should have been more descriptive action as far as the boys were concerned.
I liked it very much though, and keep writing.
I'ld say that this is a good first draft but you should have an editor go over it and talk with somone about ways to better express yourself, Other then that it was fricken hot and i need to go get a towel now.
As a bisexual man myself who has had an MMF threesome I loved this story, I would've liked more though, one page wasn't enough, please give us more!
Ian xxxxxxx
Sounds like the girl and the men have found a delicious situation, which could be exploited for more erotic stories in a series. Go wild!
I liked this story, but I'd have liked it more with more interplay between the guys. In the context, it makes sense as written, though. Good job!
I like the scene where the two guys are chatting back and forth like schoolboys, "don't wake her up!" Even as a het I liked reading about the guys's relationship, it's very kinky. I could stand to read more about their quirky relationship even if it did involve a gay sex scene. And Aurora sounds like a very hot girl next door.