All Comments on 'Average Ch. 02'

Excellent story! Please keep going!

More please. Can't wait for chapter 3. :)

Amazing. You have me hanging on every word.

Incredible! More please!

This is so good please keep going

This story is just amazing so far

This is too good not to continue!

This kind of story is exactly what I love when I'm in the mood for something other than a classic boy-meets-girl romance. Dark and beautiful with maybe a bit of human fight or flight and some Stockholm/ human desire to belong to those we see as a dominating figure. I will get on my hands and knees to beg for more of this wonderful piece!

I love this story!!pls continue

Real pity you stopped.

Sad that another story not finished it was good wish there was more

I have to admit, this was quite a good story, with plenty of in-depth descriptions in different scenarios. As a writer myself (though not on Literotica), I can appreciate the amount of research you must have put into this. I like how you described Ehlena's concussion & shoulder dislocation to the letter, as I find it quite interesting & unique to read in this type of story (as not all erotic stories have this much detail). I have to be honest, though ... I thought Ehlena was kind of being an entitled/ungrateful b*tch in that situation. She had been placed in a position where she could literally be gang-banged to death & considered less worthy than a dog's dinner. Then Kyal is there trying to protect her from such a fate & treats her as gently as possible, caring for her while she's sick (something that often chases a lot of guys away), even being enough of a gentleman to refrain from immediately taking advantage & sticking his boner in her! And she moans about a little bit of touching? She's obviously trying to have her cake & eat it, LOL. I think if I were in her place, I would've at least agreed to gentle foreplay at first & then work slowly (& gently) upwards from there. Seems like a reasonable enough offer (plus Kyal sounds really cute & protective, which is always a good combo). Still, maybe Ehlena will come around once she realises he will look after her & won't hurt her... =o)

Although, I do agree with the previous review about Ehlena being too rigid & a bit rude. But otherwise, I like it. One mistake I noticed was that in the first chapter Ehlena wanted to keep a picture of her parents because they were long dead. But in this chapter her parents are alive.