All Comments on 'Babysitter Goes Too Far Ch. 01'

Why was this in the Incest section??????

ok I guess

It's hard to continue when the opening sentence is, "My wife and Julia had a five year old girl and a seven year old boy. We were happily married, but liked to go out frequently." It would behoove you to get someone who spoke English as a first language as an editor.

This is like a first draft...very incoherent. Did you even reread what you wrote?

First it was difficult to follow and there were too many grammatical errors. Then when it started changing the point of view / perspective / narrative it made it almost too difficult to follow but then it got too strange to follow. She wasn't allowed to open a door without the alarm going off? She is told she smells like a slut by a woman she just met and she apologizes?

Thank you for writing and posting here.

Your story was hot!

There were some typos and a few wrong words, but overall a great job.

More, please....5*

Vomit. Woohoo stupid inane on so many levels. PLEASE don't inflict any more garbage like this on us readers.

1 star is way too many.

DRAGONRIDER55

Horribly written and edited, on top of which the writing and story were incoherent and remarkably inconsistent. It was as if you took your favorite fantasies (or masturbation scenarios) and shoe-horned all of them into one story. Awful!

This is the worst babysitter story I ever read...I stopped before husband & wife got to their destination.