All Comments on 'Babysitting My Cousin'

Here is a constructive advice. Take your time, this is not a sprint. No chit chat, no dialogue... it was like she was a prostitute. Have them resist their urges, have them be a little hesitant to give in.

You don't take hold of her head and force your cock down her throat. If she is being nice enough to supply a blow job, let her do it the way she wants to. That piece of shitty behaviour spoiled an otherwise moderately entertaining if highly unlikely story.

What causes the need to get in the sack? Glances, certain conversation, accidental touches, a game during swimming or other activity can give the reader a purpose for the resulting activity. Even a tension or past memory can do the same. Between relatives, a focus on a little tension over someone finding out could be useful.

There should have been more foreplay. Why did they end up having sex??

dear annony. Why did they have sex. God you are a real retard. Gave this story a 5

This was a very well written story, it kept to the point and did not divert from or get distracted by any fluf. Please write a chapter 2

Thank you for this well concocted story. Please write another chapter to follow up.