All Comments on 'Bad Day at Black Rock'

Too long with little progression. Three stars ⭐️ for this one.

None of these characters is sufficiently responsible or principled to be a good parent. The story takes little notice of the fact dependent children's life structures are willfully and selfishly put at risk by this salacious melodrama the adults seem inexorably drawn to act out. The rank immaturity of all these "beautiful people" is totally unattractive and very far from erotic. Black Rock should perhaps more accurately be called Animal House. When is the Toga Party, and who's shopping for the cucumbers?

to the critic who claims "None of these characters is sufficiently responsible or principled to be a good parent." fucking congrats for 1- stating the obvious and 2- not realizing that more marriages fail than succeeed due to the magnificent maturity and morality of the feckless selfish entitled and arrogant assholes that make up more than half of the adult american populace. douche. for me the story was interesting, shallow and well written. rk

What is not very probable is that Nick and Annie had a 7 year old son... are you telling me after Nick had so many problems with being bullied when he was young that he was not taking his son to the dojo to learn how to fight and protect himself? And, since Nick was so good at fighting you would think he would have been in lots of tournaments and winning them and bringing home trophies... that would mean his wife Annie would know all about his abilities as she attended both her sons and husband's matches... yet, the author wrote her in as totally clueless about her husbands abilities... not very credible... not credible at all... you need to reread your stories and you would have caught this total absurdity which undid your whole premise that the wife was totally clueless about Nick's abilities. 2-stars

Entertaining but crazy story. Annie knows he goes to the dojo four days a week, but somehow has zero clues about his capabilities and thinks je is just an average, small, wimp, nice guy. She saw him kick the branch and had zero clue. In real life once the two security goons moved in at Nick, and once Annie moved to Mike after having plotted the swap ambush, their marriage would be over. No respect, no trust. All gone. Maybe with a young kid, they work it through a counselor but doubtful. Also in real life, while he might talk to Mike (maybe) one more time just to show no hard feelings and deliver his ultimatum, he would never talk.to him and by extension, Jill, again. Now Sam is a different story. The implication is he was loyal to Annie beyond all measure, but once the ambush, once their marriage eroded, he could seek out Sam once.he knew his marriage was fading and he files for divorce. Might be a while, but Sam was smitten. Jill just seems in the way. Going back to Black Rock a second time is ludicrous. I knownit was so Annie could resist and save Nick from Sam. Still in the current plot, how do they now NOT end up doing some sort of indirect or direct swap? Then their marriage dies. Period. Like I said was fun and entertaining but wholly unrealistic. But then it is fiction. Would think after what happened the first time, with her fascination with discovering Nick is the actual apex predator, that she would not be flirting and dancing and holding hands with Mike the second time. That was simply contrived nonsense to yet Nick into a situation where he steps out for Sam. In reality, Annie would be frightenend of Sam being all over him and would be watching all night. In fact once she knew Sam was there, suspect that Annie would not want either to go. C'est la vie.

The majority of those who have made comments apparently would agree the children involved in the story essentially were ignored by the author. That is quite valid and reasonable criticism, demander. If one is going to write about families, the children deserve space in the story as well.

Not sure how it feel I gave u a 5 star, any woman or a man who is constantly thinking of other lovers are morons and shouldn't be married my opinion, at least at the end she pulled their heads out of their asses

Great tension (& almost interesting story) right up until the author got wimpy!

Well I noticed that you left out, for the most part, the children. If it was done on purpose, then I applaud you because, whether you like it or not, children don't even seem to matter when the parents seek other lovers. Oh sure, when the divorce talk begins, they suddenly become the focus. That is real life. Very few authors get it right and use the children to boost a character for the reader while making the another character (in these stories the cheater) seem so much worse. Truth is, neither the cheater nor the cheated are considering the children until the time comes to use them as leverage; pawns. Then it is all about the poor children. Excellent and bold. 5 stars

Naw, not my cut of tea, thank you very much.

Oh brother. She wasn't weak, she plotted to cuckold him with her lover and was lucky her husband went apex she didn't know about.

She didn't want to be faithful until she saw the women wanted her apex husband.

He actually had to beat his way through powerful people to keep her semi faithful.

Unresolved passion, unresolved marital status.

Liked it. The moralists can go and fish in other ponds.

A good story. Storyline not really my taste,but enough to read it to completion.For me to do so tells me it is a well written tale..

To commentator lanmandragon: You are a danger to society..MORALITY is what keeps humanity on its rails.

I liked the story, had some interesting points - but the narration voice was robotic and somewhat erratic - still, a ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Almost brilliant! D

His comment is correct. The second party and almost orgy do not fit at all with the first part of the story. Sarah’s comment about the kids is also correct.

Very imaginative story for this site. It does get a little fuzzy with a lot of unanswered questions at the end. How about another chapter?

Wholeheartedly agree with Anonymous commenter from 7 months ago with post starting with "Entertaining but crazy story."

Yes it was entertaining. And yes it was crazy. The fact that she went so Mike as the two goons went to attack her husband is just unbelievable. That would severely wound or maim any marriage. Also why would Nick ever deign to speak with Nick or Jill after the incident. Jill is not directly responsible, but she is not innocent with their open marriage crap and how Annie got sucked into Mike's orbit. Finally the second nesr orgy / multi swap scene at the same house makes zero sense. Except to show Annie choose her husband. It is the author's choice but seriously? No other way to get the point across? I realize that Sam was the lure and somehow Annie still wanted to "sample" Mike after almost killing her marriage. Does any of that make sense?

This story needs some more chapters.

Almost, but it just goes on and on, away from the 3 MC's. Good think he is James Bond and Superman all in one.

No More Chapters!!!! It was a very good story as is. Leave it be. Use your imagination instead of waiting for someone else to do it for you.

Excellent.

You write like Hemingway sometimes. This is one of those times. 5 stars

Second time

Still a top story, one of your best

Still 5/5

Really an excellent storyline, with just enough plot twist to keep it interesting. The only thing that kept it at 4 is that somehow there were too mny passages that didn't convey feelings in a captivating way, those were too much like a self-distancing narrator.

Still a very good story, and I'll be back fo it someday.

I gave up on this drivel once it started to promote that tired, asinine 'big cock' nonsense which is a pity because prior to that it seemed to have the makings of a good story.

JR

Not bad, but it did not need the Vietnamese angle at the beginning.

Well said at the end.