All Comments on 'Bad Day at Black Rock'

Or "If you play with matches you're bound to get burned"? Good story

Aaaaaaaaaag ……. we all,wanted you to fuck Sam unconscious

Fantasy, but great fantasy. What guy doesn't secretly want to be like Nick; bad ass, great shape, beautiful wife, movie stars throwing themselves at him? Yeah, fantasy so I scored it as such: 5*****

Lucky they didn't get burned this time!

5

I couldn't finish this. So far the plot is silly and it's horribly written. The dialogue is extremely stiff. This guy has a bunch of stories but evidently has not tried to hone his craft at all. My advice, take some online courses in writing or give it up.

As stupid as ever!

He mentioned that to Annie. She thought about it, and had her clients pull out as well. That - her clients' pull back - started the downward drop of Magnetism. Nick had shorted it. (Probably illegal - maybe not.) yes, it is it's called insider trading

They both need to get devorice then screw whoever. Nice to see someone from the six grade could write this junk.

enjoyed it but all those characters need professional help. annie the most and u kind of drop the ball on that statement about he wouldnt be so relaxed if he knew what she was thinking. so what was she thinking?

This story has a bit more to it than the surface whether the author meant it or not. Thanks for sharing.

Not sure what to think about this story! When I got to the end, all I could think about was 'February Sucks' and Linda. Here we get Annie with really three distinct opportunities to enjoy the football star and, while her husband wasn't weak like Jim, got aroused and yet still went home with the 'hero'. I noticed the early scores were OK but if the story had been tightened up a little bit would probably be a 4+ score

Nice to see that Annie got her head straight at the end. Sad she had to see that she might lose her husband before she did.

Well one kiss and she was divorce.

Jesus what women are selfish

That was surprising. Going by your previous stories I thought it might end up a Roman orgy. But in the end it turned out okay. Its your story you can write it how you want. The fact it ended up romanticly is a good thing.

Very well written, with lots of tension. Far too different from my own life for me to completely get into the events, but a nice diversion nonetheless. It’s very difficult for me to imagine the two marriages going forward. None of the kids’ lives were fleshed out at all, so it’s not clear what role they might play in the future of the marriages. The parents don’t really seem to take the kids into consideration…at least as the story is written.

Good one.

Frustrating. Good premise, but much of dialogue between the character doesn't ring true. Especially after the fight with the security guards. Characters lacked emotion.

Great job d. but when you walk on the edge a lot you're bound to fall off. this story could have so many endings. 5*

It started the usual way but had something new.

Liked it.

4.5/5

What LW stories should be.

Relationships on the edge.

Too many stories nowadays look like cut paste jobs with name changes.

Good one

Annie made the right decision

Very well written great plot and characters were well developed. Thanks for the realistic morality play.

For some reason I was expecting to be disappointed by this story but it was pretty well done.

She has a separate life that doesn’t involve him. She has accounts with unknown amounts of cash in them that he only just discovered, she has an exit strategy all laid out and ready to go.

Sooner or later she will find a new guy, cheat and throw Nick over for him. Thanks to all of her advanced work, separate life and hidden assets she will walk away Scott free

Liked the last paragraph.

Technically good writing. The story was good until Nick decided to forgive Annie. She didn't have sex with Mike, but she did betray Nick and her marriage, and was a hair away from having sex with Mike. In my opinion, Nick should have divorced Annie, and then start a relationship with Samantha and see if she would be faithful.

Fidelity is a choice as is infidelity. So, you either make up your mind in advance what you're going to do in the face of temptation or every time you're tempted you're forced to make your decision under less than optimal conditions. If you've already decided what you're going to do, then when faced with that situation that would entice you to do otherwise then you're not stuck on that precipice suddenly undecided. You just have to remind yourself you already made the hard decision. You just have to follow through on what was already decide. Also, I believe we should be our own keepers. We need to take self responsibility for who we are and what we do. We must take responsibility for our choices, our behavior and ultimately our happiness

Here's to Annie! For waking up and doing what's right for her, Nick and Travis! -- 5☆

who is Travis?

Post nup and what about those hidden accounts

Fun story. I like how it morphed from a cheating story to a group story, in a way that seemed logical and realistic. Annie made the right decision there at the ene, but if it had gone the other way at the second party (*not* the first one), I bet their marriage would have survived. Everyone would have been on the same page.

Written very well and it has a feel of deep thought. Maybe experience. I wish it were a longer tale because I just plain enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing this great creation.

The Vick/Vince editing error drove me nuts - sorry! Otherwise, it was a solid, yet formulaic, story and better written narrative than the last couple outings by you. Good job overall! 4*

It started quite well but then seemed to lose its way a little bit.

Your grammar is getting better. It is no longer distracting to your stories.

Well done - keep writing!

cucks who can beat up their wives lovers are still cucks

cucks who are offered threesomes and foursomes are still cucks

and cucks get one star

Not even remotely realistic!

I wonder what ordinary men might do if faced with the extraordinary dilemma of being fought over by three beautiful women. I'll never have to worry about being in such a predicament, but apparently someone has such concerns. A nice bit of fantasy. 4*

I have to say this is one of your better stories. Seems everyone got what they all wanted excepy Vick.. HA HA

Sorry but there's no way they just kiss n makeup that easily

Lujon.. what cuck??

5 stars to make up for that idiocy.

I could see the story ending about page 3 or so when the set up went down. Seeing that there were more pages to come I was intrigued as to how things would follow. Would there be a reconciliation or was this going to be a love story between Nick and Sam? I am OK with the reconciliation because ultimately it was Annie who saved the “promise” which, in my opinion, helped to make up for the set up. it was Annie’s character that was truly at risk in the end, but what makes the reconciliation possible is that Nick has to now understand where Annie’s head was at earlier in the story.

4 star - and only because it was NOT a cuck story.

If a husband whips a man hitting on his wife thus preventing the sexual act, he is not a cuckold. It isn't even close. Now lujon2019, you get one star since you probably got hard thinking of Nick in a speedo. However, the author gets 5 stars for an entertaining story with interesting characters and a happy ending.

He was way too casual with that betrayal

Great Story. I saw no cucks. Keep writing.

anon.1

Started out great but I felt it starting to derail half way through. By the end I lost interest. You also brought up Annie's secret accounts with a pile of money in them and then never addressed them later. Looks a lot like an exit stage right cash to me.

Eh, okay. The setup was pretty cringe-worthy. The husband is secretly wealthy and a super fighter...yeah, okay, let's have a marriage based on lies and hiding shit from each other.

Then after the entire fiasco in the middle, the end pretty much destroys any high ground the husband had and makes him just as bad as the rest of them.

I did enjoy the bit where Nick stood up for himself at the party, way too many stories that have the husband do nothing and just slink away when in a public setting.

Since Annie never fucked anyone else, I fail to understand the comments about being a cuckold. Guess some folks can't get out of their own heads. 4 stars for an entertaining story.

I really enjoyed this story apart from just one annoying thing - you made a big point about the wife having secret accounts (also seemed he his some money from her) but nothing was mentioned about it and it had no effect on the story.

So why bring it up? Totally irrelevant but if your married and family nd that out about your partner in reality you are going to ask about it.

You did a good job with this set

story devolved into nothing but a cock fest. In the beginning of this story we have a dilemma about a wife who is drifting away from a husband with a separate bank accounts in a separate life doing things separately.

By the middle of page 2 all of that is completely forgotten

Nick needs to have a complete discussion: Will they be a single family with their son, Travis, and full accounting of their assets. They also need to decide if they want to avoid the Jill, Mike, Sam risk as the next time will be the last of their marriage.

Great start and through the fight, then it lost it.

What a crock of shit. Staying true is hard to do. That ending just didn’t work. After the beating mike took he would never get near Annie. You made nick one rare loyal husband. Tempted by Samantha . and Jill. He new all marriage would end and trust would be gone. All for some pussy and dick. Story was so so bad.

Good story, this was definitely one of your better tales. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Scores 5/5

I really liked your characters, they were all strong and self possessed. There was none of the typical melodrama and angst, just straight forward procedural if then else.

I especially like the Nick-Mike talk. Civilized, it can happen that way...I got into a fight one time he hurt me and I hurt him. We became friends. Unsure about Annie, is it only like Nick said, baddest beast in the jungle? probably yes, we're all pretty primitive actually and it's totally Darwinian.

Also, I get excited when I see you have a new story. You're one of my favorite writers. And the guys who complain about Vick/Vince, wtf? Figure it out--them not you.

Beautiful young people from entertainment and professional athletics - surprised it’s been this staid this long.

Juvenile claptrap, not a story. Absurd.

Another story of crap about a fanous guy who needs to fuck some ignorant slut

Love helps when you are struggling with temptation. And love helps without anger. A different story in this category: not unique, but not common. In the end, a real loving wife, a smart woman who acted with the real strength of women to attract and seduce her man with the intimacy of choosing him.

Lu, that’s almost every story in here dumbass

"But Mike said, "Women are just as weak as men when it comes to lust and sex"...

Partially true... most women such as myself don't get hot and bothered just cause some cute guy smile at us... I don't understand the women like this wife feeling flattered cause a guy want to get in their pants. That's not a ego boost😭😭😭😭.. that's just typical man whore shit... men will fuck anything.. I've walked to the store looking a hot mess and guys still stop to ask me for my number.. it does absolutely nothing to me when a guy wants to get in my thongs. It doesn't make me feel sexy or wanted.. because I know that's what men do, especially self entitled men whores... my problem with this story is he stopped what his wife had planned.. how is he suppose to know she would've chosed him and their marriage? How would he know another good looking celebrity man wouldn't make her forget all about him.......again? There will always be doubts. There was no consequences for the potential slut.. he rewarded her bad behavior with an allegedly good fucking... he beat up her soon to be lover up, but she gets dick for her plans to fuck another man... huh? 🧐That didn't make any sense. You can't reward bad behavior, how else will she know what she did was wrong and it could end them? This story wasn't believable.. because there was no anger at the wife for her treachery, deceit and betrayal... she tried to set him up so she can fuck around.... I mean, it really doesn't matter they hadn't fuck now, does it? The fact that her and mike talked about her marriage and decided how her marriage is going to go... is enough to think about a divorce...the husband wasn't even brought in on their plan until Sam told him. Despite the numerous warnings Nick gave her, she didn't cancel her stupid plans, didn't tell him forget the party, let's just stay home and you can stretch my pussy out... nope, her pussy wanted Mike. The only reason she wasn't face down, ass up was because he stopped it..periodddddd😉... I know had he just sat and waited to see, she would've went up there with Mike. She even agreed to mike hiring security guards to hold nick in case he tried to stop them.. that's not a good wife😭😭😭😭😭.. that's a slut you should run from. A slut you shouldn't invest another minute on.... some women can in fact resist. For some it's not very hard🤷🏽‍♀️.. I don't need my husband to help me resist another man. I'm an adult, I should be able to think for myself and handle my self. The writer wants us to believe nick and her made it... impossible since there was no consequence or talk about why she thought he would be ok with her sleeping with mike. Why did she give his half of the decision making in their marriage to another man? How is he suppose to trust her? How is he suppose to trust her to be in another sexy, rich man presence?.. until nick and her find the reason/cause as to why she wanted to sleep with another man and thought he would be ok with it, that marriage would be dead and gone...Until they figure out how to prevent this from happening again, it's gonna happen again... I think it's silly to think just fucking her, the same fucking night she tried to play him for a fool, will make everything ok. The relationship would NEVER be the same. Impossible. He would be looking at her in a different light.. I can assure you, fucking would've been the last thing on a husband's mind, after finding out their wife was trying to trick them into swapping 😭😭😭.. I'm just baffled why Mike got the crap beat out of him but the slut just got a good fucking?🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣.. .. also that fight scene with Mike doesn't mesh with my perception of the MC... I think he's a wimp🤷🏽‍♀️🤭... him beating Mike's ass didn't change my mind.. the women fawning over his body and dick equally didn’t change my mind.. I STILL questioned his manhood🤧... he's a pussywhipped wimp at that. That's why his dick was able to get hard when they got home after the party... it really irk me the wife didn’t even get a slap on the wrist.

This started off well but the ending sucked.

Annie started an emotional affair with Mike, and crossed the line physically with him several times. She then conspired to dupe her husband, so that she could go off and fuck the lover. She acted like a selfish, manipulative, deceitful slut and destroyed all the trust in their relationship.

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Despite her long string of betrayals, and pushing the marriage to breaking point, Annie got away with zero consequences. At the absolute bare minimum, she owed Nick a free pass with both Samantha and Jill, which he should've taken full advantage of. There's no way he should've forgiven Annie until her enthusiastic participation in threesomes with both women.

Very intense story--I thought the tension of the first couple of pages was terrific. Towards the end it got far more unrealistic, in my opinion, more of a group sex fantasy, but still a great read.

Thanks, ohio

Agree with lujon2019! And It's just a matter of time and more parties before the swaps start. And Travis will be forgotten by his mommy and daddy, like he is now. Somehow you managed a story where all the characters are sleazy vain pieces of shit.

Good story. Good character development, settings and pace along with the twisted plot development. The detailed mentioning of their finances early on was a wrong turn down a one way street.

Being an old guy I really liked the phrase, "playing spin the fuck."

Good story. Unpredictable, and that’s good. It surprised me that Nick went from nearly kicking Annie to the curb, to being okay, in such a short time. He knew she was bribing him with sex, and also knew that it didn’t resolve his concerns.

I totally agree with Anon between schwanze and powersworder. 0 trust for a woman who would throw away her marriage and set her husband up to either fail his morals or get jumped by security and tossed and go get some dick, just cause she got worked on by who she thought was an alpha male. In the end the only people who got punished were 2 guys trying to do their job and Mike who although he is a toilet bowl of used enema, didn't make any vows or promises to Nick. Should have just called her out and told her fuck that party I'm not going, you can go if you want but if you do I'll file for divorce asap. In fact I may do that anyway for setting me up so you can physically cheat after all the emotional cheating you did. Only way you might save our marriage is stay home, drop his account, and tell Mike to fuck off.

Like previous comments, tale started out well. But changed to a pile of cow dung at the end.

Often this type of story involves a wife that is super looking, wonderful wife, terrific mother and loyal to her man. Then somethings happens… an irresistible man, Slut Ray; something alters her and the cheating, attempt to, or request to cheat enters the marriage. Ok, that’s a common category here, and I for one love these types of stories.

With this one though, not only did she do the unexpected, but Nick did a flip which lost my respect. His initial response to her was hell no. Even after the set up at the party, he made it clear, that even a sexy as Sam was, he was still keeping his promise. Annie kept up the effort to swap and his response was to insist they leave and divorce if Mike was what she wanted.

In the aftermath of the party, the marriage seemed to be on life support. When she asked if they were OK, the answer from Nick was. “No.” The narrative led me to believe that Nick was deciding if he would kick her to the proverbial curb, regardless of if she backed off of being allowed to fuck Mike.

Somewhere around the middle of the third page, Nick started to change. Meeting up with the guy who plotted to fuck his wife, going back to another party at Black Rock? WTF?

By page four, Nick is practically offering his wife to Mike while being distracted by Sam and Jill. This is the same offer that he almost killed the guy over. At this point I’m thinking flush them all down the shitter.

In the last paragraph, Annie has an epiphany, and the fuck that she worked so hard to get was passed up and we are to believe that Nick just deflated his hardon for Sam and went home with his wife like a good boy, even though it was her that put this all of this in motion.

My ending: fuck the piss out of Sam & divorce the untrustworthy bitch.

Still, for your effort, and my free entertainment – four stars.

@KittyCampbell

@Sarahwithlove

a cuck is a piece of shit wo accepts the fact his wife is a cheating whore

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she hid money from him for years

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she cheated emotionally and lied to him for months

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she enjoyed the fact other men wanted her and encouraged it

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she physically cheated by making out with another man

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she then jerked off that man in public

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she conspired with three other people for her husband to be seduced

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she allowed another man to kiss her in full view of her husband

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she allowed another man to fondle her in full view of her husband

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she allowed another man to dry hump her in full view of her husband

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she argued with him when he said no

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she chose another man over him when she thought the security goons would kick his ass,

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she is a cheating, lying, manipulative whore, and he is a cuck for accepting the cheating slut

So sorry, not the most exciting ending. And definitely not my choice.

Good timing: you stopped writing the story shortly after you stopped telling an interesting story. They were devolving into a high school necking party, except with more than VD and pregnancy being the consequences. In the end I didn't care who ended up fucking whom, or why, or for how long. If any of the marriages last for much longer it will be pure luck, or just lack of opportunity. Something will happen, and one or more of them will fuck up. Or maybe not. One thing is for sure, I couldn't care less. Thanks for the vaccination, there's nothing here to catch. And thanks for the effort.

A sophomoric piece of crap probably written by a 5'4" weak wimp, but with morals.

A lot of almost. Strictly speaking if a spouse says they are willing to swap, they have committed adultery even if they don’t do the deed. So both Nick and Annie are cheaters.

However, it was nice to see when the rubber hit the road Annie at least had the will power to say no especially given the temptations the author placed before both of them.

Refreshing!

No redeeming social justice to this POS at all. I must agree with kirei8. LP

A good entertaining story that I really enjoyed! Towards the end I was afraid, but then everything turned out to be correct!

D-man, I enjoyed this one. While I can’t relate to the lives of the rich and beautiful, you did a good job with the characters. The idea of an instant, intense attraction to someone is very real, but it’s lust, not love. Love May, or may not follow the attraction. The whole alpha-male attraction in females is very much genetic. What gets little play in LW is the opposite. IF the genetic attraction to alpha males is too much for a female, why aren’t men hopelessly attracted to “Breed-mare” type females? After all, prodigy is what the true alpha male is genetically coded to desire. But, this is fantasy and that would not make for an erotic story, LOL.

Sorry to run on, D-man, good story. Thanks for sharing.

Wow! A Demander morality play! Liked it. Five stars ⭐️ for this one.

Excellent thought provoking tale of temptation and resistance. The right outcome for Nick, I feel.

Didn’t much care for this one, but it’s still better than 85% of the trash posted in LW.

The story and characters started off strong and then about the mid point the writing became disjointed. Like he was trying to write a sexy scene but became lost in the words flow. Thus, only a 3* from this reader.

She well could have been a slut, but Annie came to her senses and claimed her prize- her husband...

Nice story.

"Everybody is weak sometimes. Then we depend on others to keep things straight. And we're lucky if we have someone to do that."

No story is perfect, so always leave'em with an inimitable "5" ending.

He had a real connection with Sam and could a really made a go of it. Instead he chooses his lying, conniving,money hiding, touches other guys dicks, wife? Yeah that's a shit move brah

I lost all interest in the story after the confrontation. It just meandered along with no form and not much to say. I didn't care about any character. Nobody evinced any empathy what so ever. Meh, kind of describes this best.

I was disappointed that Nick became so weak with his morals, after showing how far he went to keep them at the first party.

I like a good story where they realize what they would lose

Enjoyed the story. Thanks for your writing.

Pretty good story, thank you.

Unless I missed it, neither Annie nor Nick took into account what their actions would do to their child! Although, maybe that's more true to real life when lust takes over your brain! Enjoyed the story 5*!

Dobbin55

Well written but they should mo e on from their marriage.

An excellent story well told, just the right amount of tension, sex, and compassion. I will now try your other submissions

Well-conceived and -executed tale. We see Annie crumbling and near-corrupted. Even as Nick saves her and the marriage, he is tainted with the same moral ambiguity. As he reinstills fidelity in her, it is now less certain in him. When their interplay with the celebs with fluid morals resumes, he is more so the one who is sliding. This time Annie pulls HIM in. So that they have hope to remain a couple and raise their child with some coherence. Well done.

Solid, solid five stars. Fantastic ending!!

I lost count after a certain number of erections men kept getting. It's like every male had the involuntary response of a teenager.