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Click hereThen there's context and continuity. Where are your fuckers -- that's essentially what they are -- when you're describing them, how did they get there, and in what state? If the woman has pulled the top of her dress down to her waist so the guy can suck her nipples, does the dress come off over her legs or does it have to get pulled over her head? If the latter, the tit action will have to stop for a moment or two. Is she wearing heels? Do these come off before she gets onto the bed? If not, is there a risk that she'll injure him with them? (This has happened to me). If he's taken his pants off, where are his shoes? If she's not wearing a bra, make sure that he doesn't take one off her later in the scene. Or have her wearing a dress at the start of the scene and a blouse and skirt later on. Or have clothes scattered around, or put on afterward, that they weren't wearing at the start. (I've seen several instances of this type of continuity error). If they're drinking, please ensure they put the glasses down before they start having sex, or all that broken glass could cause a nasty injury. And if they're going for anal, at least try to make this credible; spitting on his cock and shoving it in only happens in porn movies where the girl has already filled her cavity with lube before they start shooting.
And think about how people generally react around sex. If I read a story where, on the first page, a girl starts quoting her measurements and those of her friends to me, I tend to switch off. In general, a woman may describe herself as 'skinny', or 'curvy', or 'busty', or maybe 'plump' or 'generously proportioned', but I've never met or corresponded with a woman who will say "Hi, I'm Pandora, and I'm 48-24-38". OK, most guys will have measured their dick at some stage, but generally girls don't ask "So how long is your dick?" They take a look, and it's either too big, too small or just right. Girls can refuse anal -- and even vaginal sex -- because a dick is just too big, or enjoy it specifically because the guy has a smaller one. Some women with small mouths can struggle to give a full blowjob to even an average-sized cock. And these aren't all disadvantages; you can use all of these elements in your story to give it some 'texture' and a sense of realism. In "Mr. Big", my hero has a cock the size of a baseball bat. Young, inexperienced women look at it and are terrified, but he eventually finds several willing partners from among older ladies who've experienced the dubious pleasures of childbirth. It also gives several opportunities for humor, which is something I like to do.
I try to populate my stories with plausibly-real people in believable situations doing things that are physically possible. Not all of the sex has to be good; in 'Uncle Bob', Stacey has a painful experience when she tries anal and isn't properly prepared. Many women can't come just from being fucked, and some can be hurt by a guy's clumsiness or over-enthusiasm. Guys lose erections or have trouble controlling their orgasms. Not all your characters have to be young or even good-looking; many of mine are the wrong side of 40, and some are substantially older. I'm currently working on a novel which involves a 'brothel for ladies', staffed with attractive young men. Some of the clients are in their sixties, and are of all shapes and sizes. If they weren't, the story would lose credibility and, as I said earlier, I like to write about things that could happen, people you could theoretically meet, and actions that are practically possible and realistic. So mix it up a little; a bit of realism may make your story more interesting. Most Literotica stories are sexual fantasy. Some are quite literally incredible -- as in 'impossible to believe'. Give yours a little texture and people might enjoy it more.
Storyboarding, timelines and preparing to write
OK, so I'm something of a 'pantser'. That doesn't mean that I think my work is total pants, as we say in the UK, meaning crap -- others may disagree -- but that I often write 'by the seat of my pants'; ie I often start with an idea and then let the narrative take me where it will. When you've written as much as I have, this can work for short stories, especially if you have a clear 'narrative arc' in your mind, as I usually do. However, for longer pieces, it can be a problem. My 'Uncle Bob' saga, that I started nine years ago, keeps bouncing around without ever really approaching the ending that's in my head, as I keep cramming in new ideas. I also discovered that, in my desire to explain Bob and Stacey's developing relationship, I'd forgotten that Stacey, a high-school senior, would have had a senior prom and a graduation ceremony somewhere in the period I describe. These are huge events in a teenager's life, but I never even mention them, so I now have to review my timelines (see below) and update a couple of earlier chapters already on Literotica if the story is to be believable.
The best way around this is to storyboard. This is standard practice with movies. All good novelists use the technique (see some of Graham Swift's work to observe a master of this technique at work), and the better professional speakers do it with presentations and lectures. It maps out the narrative arc and helps with the timeline. It's useful in keeping the content to a manageable level and preventing the temptation to cram in too much. It also helps avoid inconsistencies, manage different plot threads and to get to the end without wandering off into unhelpful literary side-alleys.
There are many IT-based tools that you can use that will help, but you can also storyboard on good old paper. Here's the basis of the technique. You can adapt it as you see fit.
Keep it punchy -- 'Show, don't tell' and self-editing
A common error I come across is too much exposition. It's an easy trap to fall into, when you get grabbed by an idea or a theme, to go on and on describing what happens and fail to realize that you've lost your reader. Hopefully, on a critical read through, you'll spot where you simply ramble on, talking about things that are happening and using description rather than hints in dialog.
Try, whenever you can, to avoid long passages of "this happened, then this, and after that, this happened again, and then that other thing, and then some more of that." Sketching a few crucial experiences and some interactions in dialogue between characters can save pages of text.
I'd counted nineteen floors. The numbers on the landing walls were lost in the thick, black smoke. We stopped, panting, sweat dripping down our faces under our masks.
"Half gone." It was hard to hear Julie over the roar of the flames, just yards away. She tapped the gauge on her BA -- her Breathing Apparatus. My BA registered the same.
Two figures emerged from the smoke, towels wrapped around their faces, coughing. They looked on the brink of collapse.
So -- should we still try to climb four more floors with half our air left, looking for survivors, or help these people? Anyone we found would have to be carried, so could we help others down while also rescuing these two?
A fireman's training doesn't give you a moral yardstick to help you decide who to save and who to abandon. You want to save everyone. Sometimes you just can't.
This is based on something I read on the Web -- the first-hand story of a fireman and his (female) firefighting partner in Grenfell Tower in London in 2017, trying to rescue people from that appalling disaster. The original text was a verbatim, sequential description of events. I felt I didn't have to describe them getting the emergency call, seeing the fire and the chaos, putting on their breathing apparatus, carrying all of their heavy kit up 19 floors in thick smoke. Within 4 paragraphs I wanted to show the moral dilemma they had to face; whether they should follow their orders and go to the 23rd floor to look for survivors and thereby risk losing others and not getting out themselves. One carefully-chosen scene with a small selection of observations saves a page and a half of exposition and drops the reader straight into the action. Later, I slipped in tiny bits about the back-story, but the crucial part is to focus on what happened in the Tower and the impact it had on him, rather than a lot of preamble.
Most of us write too much. Stephen King says that, when you have what you consider to be a final draft, you should then seek to take out around 10%. Many of the stories I've read could usefully lose 25% -- including some of my own. One of my first short stories was a 6-page piece about a drug addict who imagines he sees a small child scratch herself on a dirty needle, rushes to take her to a hospital -- and in the process, saves himself. When I took it to a writers' group, one person said "that's lovely. Now make it half as long and take out the Hollywood ending." After editing, the piece was 'flash' fiction -- 1 page long. I'd lost over 80% of the unnecessary text, and the story was much better for it.
So BE RUTHLESS; leave out or take out stuff that doesn't add to the story -- it's just bulk. Use asides, brief observations, or small bits of dialog between characters, to tell the reader something they need to know without pages of 'this happened, then this, then that, and then this...' This is what writers call 'show, don't tell'. Long screeds of description or explanation -- 'exposition', as it's known -- slow the flow and can be tedious. Keep it tight and punchy, and use dialogue to fill in the background as briefly as possible.
I've written pieces for competitions where there is a strict word-count. This is great discipline -- on my 'final' edit, I go through, looking for flabby sentences and redundant detail and chopping it out. In most instances, you can cut down a sentence so that it uses fewer words to say the same thing. Or: most sentences can be shorter without losing meaning. Get what I'm saying? And I find it quite fun to go through, tightening up the work in this way, trying to meet the challenge of a word count. So try setting yourself a target -- 10% to 25% less than you currently have -- and then go for it; not with everything, as Literotica doesn't care how long your story is, but at least occasionally. It's great discipline and will improve your writing.
Conclusion
Writing isn't about 'the idea'; it's about how you develop that idea into a compelling story that someone wants to read. I've had literally hundreds of ideas for stories. A little over 50 pieces -- complete short stories and chapters of longer works -- are on Literotica. Maybe a hundred more are in development or have been published elsewhere. Some have remained 'in development' for 15 years. A story is no more about the idea than a painting is. You may have a great idea for a picture, but if you can't paint like Leonardo, Van Gogh or Picasso, it's not going to turn from that idea into a masterpiece. If you can't paint at all, it isn't going to turn into anything.
It's the same with writing. An idea, however great, is still just an idea until you can take that germ of a story and develop it into something interesting, fun, intriguing -- whatever. Above all, it has to be readable or no one will read it.
I've written this article to try to help people write better, and hopefully to save me hours of anguish in future editing tasks. It's a lot longer than I planned when I set out, so I should maybe have taken my own advice and edited it down. But I won't (at least not right now), because I want to get it out there so that people can start to learn from it and maybe give me some constructive feedback.
So good luck with your writing. The advice in here is really just the absolute basics. If you want to be a good writer, follow Stephen King's advice -- 'read a lot, write a lot'. Just make sure that when you're writing, you don't slip back into any of the many problem areas I've covered here.
And if you need an editor, I make a point of responding to every request, so you only need to ask.
Hi 'Anonymous'.
I was taught by my secretary, back in the last century, that double-spacing was good practice. I used it until about 5 years ago, when I discovered it had very much fallen out of favour. Jacob Rees-Mogg apparently insists on it, so I find that another good reason not to do it! If you look at some of my earlier stories (eg 'There Is Another Way' or 'Carcassonne'), you'll see I consistently use double-spacing, but now I go through my stories before publication and globally remove multiple spaces. I've always separated my paragraphs with white space and I left-justify all the text. Other writers I know still indent the first line and leave no blank space between paragraphs. Styles change, I guess.
But thanks for the feedback. All comments are always welcome.
I enjoyed your guide very much and share many of your objections (and your country and age range I suspect). I would like to suggest one addition to all stories that you haven't mentioned; the double space after a full stop (period point). I learned that published books were always printed like this on a school trip in the 1970s and I still think it makes a small, but significant enough, addition to the ease of reading the printed word (on paper or screen).
If you are using Word I often use the Replace feature to add an extra space - pick a Nonbreaking space from the special characters list. Just try it and see what you think. The double space has declined in use rapidly over the last 2 decades and may disappear forever. But I still like it.
Thanks for listening. Now time to check out that Captain Whatsits story you liked so much ...
Oh, it's you again. Is it possible that I used an quote taken from your 'story' as an example of how not to write? As I said in my previous comment - I get quite 'arsey' as we say over here, if it's clear that the author is lazy or functionally illiterate - or, often, both. Which if these did I tell you you were?
Pedantic. Your stories are bad. Silly to take advice from someone so unskilled.
Hi. Thanks for the well-considered feedback, and apologies for the very slow response. My partner and I have both had a few health issues that have focused my attention elsewhere over the past year.
Yes, I realise that a lot of my sentences are too long. I do try to control this - usually on subsequent edits - but a few slip through the net. And yes, it probably DID start as a rant, because of a few things.
Firstly, I've still so far found only 1 person who has EVER responded to my request for editing, and she did a pathetic job, trashing my story (which is now on Literotica with a 4.25) after reading one page. Secondly, I DO respond to EVERY request for editing, though I get quite 'arsey' as we say over here, if it's clear that the author is lazy or functionally illiterate - or, often, both.
When I started writing this document, I'd really had enough of people with no talent trying to write erotic fiction, and expecting an editor to compensate for their complete lack of skill. I edited one story where a woman was apparently sending long text messages whilst riding her husband in cowgirl position. OK, if it was meant to be a comedy, I could handle this, but the author thought it was realistic. I pointed this out, as well as quite a few other plot, grammatical & punctuation errors. The author did just enough to get it past the Literotica moderators and posted it. It was utter shite, but hey, he'd got PUBLISHED! And you saw the examples of some of the other utter crap I've had to deal with. So the document was really a plea to would-be writers not to trouble me until they at least understood the basics.
Thanks for writing such constructive feedback. If I return to this document, I'll try to address some of the issues you've raised. I also teach MS Office, with a major focus on Word, so if you're having problems reading stuff on Literotica (it's often hard to read on screen, though slightly better now that they've changed the layout), then have you tried copying the text into Word? You could then use the in-built reader (text to speech) and/or the various tools in Windows & Office to improve legibility. If you'd like some help with these, message me through the site and I'll provide some support.