by thunderstealer
This was (I hope!) a delicious "amuse bouche" to the banquet that is to follow. I'm not a prolific writer, but my appetite for quality writing is somewhat insatiable, and this is a great beginning. Good imagery, and although some people might have a little trouble with the shifting of the tenses, it works for me. And thank you for writing erotica and not just a stroke story. I could smell the musk and sawdust of the room. Yum.
Thanks to you all. It's my first public story, taken from notes I made a while back. I look forward to writing more, and adore constructive criticism, so keep it coming. As for the first dear reader's comments about factual details, I assure you, honey, it's all quite, quite true.
I made the Eh? comment earlier, I did mean to say how much I enjoyed the story too. I just felt the first person was criticising it for silly reasons.
First class story, speaks to the emotions and the slight sense of dislocation of being a foreigner.
This is an outstanding story. Thoughtful and Extremely well written and then we all have to endure quibbles about where Gypsies can be found and the length of time to get from Paris to Barcelona. Sheesh!
Get a clue you two........
Thunderstealer Please more, it was quite a treat to find your story this morning.
Thank you
The eh? is for the previous commentor. There are gypsies in every country in Europe. And why do you think the drive to Barcelona took 12 hours, you tit?