All Comments on 'Beach House'

Many thanks. Please more!

The teasing and build up go me soooo wet that I had to, you know... My brother is a hunk, and I have this fantasy of fucking him. I also have a fantasy of being dp'd, but only have one brother, so I include our father who is also a hunk. I fantasize about my brother fucking me while I suck my dad dry, and then they switch. I have never taken in the ass from anyone, so don't know how that would work. My husband and I share this fantasy and it makes our sex great. Now we are talking about a gangbang with hubby, brother, and daddy, of course with me as the center of attention. Oooh, all our bodies tangled together and all that cum in me and all over me. Can it happen? Maybe, just maybe... Wet Kisses xxcoooxxx, Sexy Little M

This is a fucking fantastic story keep up the good work.5/5

You gorgeous girl. You are a very talented writer with an erotic imagination. Love your fantasies and only wish I were your brother. Your story is very uplifting, if you know what I mean! Keep it up!

wayo many inconsistencys like why would he rent a one bedroom house.

and why would he even agree to go skinny dipping or sleep in the same bed. and he gave into her way to easily makes it way to unrealistic. if you want to write fantasies they have an area for that but fiction has to sound somewhat realistic and believable stop rewriting human nature. I LOVE BROTHER SISTER INCEST STORIES BUT ONLY IF THEY ARE BELIEVABLE AND THIS SURE WASN'T

DBRS

I wanted to cum but you just left me a little short and a little soft... my problem I suppose. A few oddity's about the house and it's hard to imagine such a dork as big brother Darren. Dare by the way did not work for either. Sort of sounded like 'I dare you or worse, officer Dare.

You have the talent to really turn the reader on, just let it go, and have some fun with incest, that's what its all about, turning the reader off and getting off sexually.

This is a well-written story, and it aroused me even though the plot elements are fairly standard. I would have liked Darrin more if he had been portrayed as not quite so clueless. We are supposed to accept that he was completely unaware of his sister's feelings, which does not seem consistent with his supposed intelligence.

At first I considered the story being too short, as I read the first paragraphs, but I have to appologize. You got the perfect turn around of events. Making her almost leave was a great idea to quicken the pace. The size of your story is quite appropriate.

I also liked very much, you didn't make the common mistake to put up an "perfect ending" as I've read to many times. It's a good idea to let them enjoy themselves for now... What will be, will be...

I gave five stars, and you deserved it!

One of the better one's i have read in a while. GOOD Work. Well written for the younger crowd

you could make more good story

when we were teenagers, my brother would watch me masturbate, but i wasn't aware of this until he told me one day. I would get naked and lay on my back and spread my legs open wide and slide something hard into my pussy and with my other hand, I fingered my clit until I came. I would do this daily and for at least 30 min. from where he was hiding, he could see my pussy very well and I know he was jacking off watching. i went to his room once and he told me he wanted to feel his cock on my pussy just to see what it felt like so we each pulled our pants down and our underwear and kneeled down and he took his cock in his hand and began to rub my whole pussy with it. he never put it in me but now i wish he would have. i think about him and his cock a lot, many years later and wish he would fuck me. i think about his hard cock whenever i masturbate and wonder if he still thinks of my pussy.. true story

One of the better new stories out there, very hot! Keep up the good work :)

would love to see a series with your stories?! they're amazing and a few of the best ones i've read so far. you have talent :)

I hope you add to Darren and Delilah's story, I am completely in love with both of them!

I have enjoyed all your stories, just wish you would consider adding to them! I can definitely feel the underlying passion you feel for your brothers, when reading your work. Makes me wish I had thought to fool around with my two handsome brothers when we were young!

When are you going to give us another story? It has been over six months since your last posting! You are a good writer, I love the pacing of your stories. I think you could give your readers even more emotional involvement with your characters. My only criticism is to be more careful in the correct spelling in some of your word choices, i.e., weekly should be weakly, taught should be taut. Very minor changes, probably bothers me because my job requires accurate spelling...

If she has been that deeply in love with him and for that long, then why is she not a virgin?

Delilah and Darren. Hummm, nice names. Darren surely had this subconscious desire for a number of years for Lilah, but some people need a quick kick in the butt to itnite the inhibitions, urges, hidden lust and desires. Lilah was the nice touch that brought her brother to his fucking (no pun intended) senses. Lilah was correct when she address him as a dork just a few minutes after that had reunited.

Though Darren is a dork, these young adolescents (he's probably 21 and she's probably 19 years old) are a nice, sweet, charming sibling couple. There was a mention at the ending of their newly established incestual activated attraction of "forever"; it made my heart flutter and dick putter!

This saga, shough short, could progree into several sequels of enduring and endearing bliss of various deminsions for them as a couple doing things that young adults do when in love, attached and care only for eacy other and pleasing their partner. However, this story being several years old there is doubt the writer will or would consider another chapter or two. If so, bring it on; many comments have asked for more!!! I agree, and second the call.

At first, when I read the description of this story, I thought that it was just going to be a typical fucking story, but then I saw the high rating, so I decided to give it a try. Turns out, it is a lovely one! You certainly layed out their background through their emotional closeness, which made their physical love for each other believable.

this was in no way a good story there were to many loose ends. like why would he rent a one bedroom house is he stupid or did he plan it? what was the problem with the father? there are more holes here than in swiss cheese. the best thing you can do is rewrite this and do it right filling in the plot holes and giving proper background and character development then it might be worthy of a reread and a posative vote. as is it deserves a negative vote.

While i hate how lit's comment section inevitably becomes a silly hugbox, the previous anonymous commenter doesn't actually understand what a plot hole truly is as there aren't any in this story.

what i am disappointed in is that he's the love of her life, all she can think about blah blah but she's got no problems going a-dickin'. always bugs me in stories like this

Wish there was a sequel to the story as I would love to read more about this story line

I would love to hear more of this story. My husband read me this story and I had the pleasure of 4 big O's. Can you imagine if I had 6 more weeks of this story. Holy hell girl...get writing. 😈

Please continue

Good thing the second half of the story was so awesome, because the first half you just want to scream and kill the douchey pussy acting like a thirteen year old! Argh!! Thats my only complaint, so many stories having the brothers acting like that, ugh!

Absolutely loved the sister though! ...never addressed sis not packing any panties though! Hehehe ;)

Thank you for this darling story. I found it not only romantic and sensual but possessed of a curious mixture of brevity and fullness. Not a word was wasted. It was neat and compact but felt entirely complete. Of course you could always write a sequel, maybe several, but it is otherwise a very well written stand alone tale.

This story was wonderful. I got lost in your limpid writing and the sex was realistic and charming. I’m sorry to see that you’ve moved on. I would love more to this story,

Amazingly written hot story