All Comments on 'Becky Ch. 01'

More - and don't lose sight of the facials!

Please, Please proof read what you write or type before submitting. If not, atleast let someone else proof. It is a very good story, but you need alot of work before the second part comes out.

A very good storie .In the nex CH. you could add mother into it AS Becky fine out mother is geting on with the preacher and his wife and mabe 3 daughters some thing to think about when you start ch # 2

This could easily be a '100' if Becky and your daughter turned up pregnant. You have full justification to do this because your wife is such a holy roller, so perhaps you need to start a couple of new families and send your wife packing.

you need help in your writting plus it would help if you describ the daughters measurements.

Terrible grammar and spelling. Can anyone say proofread?

Religion is the source of everyone's problems?

Decent story line, bad grammar/poor spelling is very distracting.

She truly deserves it have Mary watch the action a couple of times. Also Becky's father has to watch for his actions.

Loved it. Made me wish I had a daughter or a young neighbor

Many typos but arousing read until you raped Mary. That brought my rating down a star.

Accidental exposure to Becky is an obvious line...