All Comments on 'Becoming a Playboy'

Terrible spelling and grammer is a real turn-off

trying to tease and not doing nothing but writing hot air.

Please think about using an editor before you submit another story. I could barely get through this because of the poor spelling and grammar.

Absolute crap writing..Very boring.

Story has the basics but needs LOTS of work! Get help!

It's hard to follow with all the grammatical errors. I actually had to stop reading because the grammar takes away from the story. PLease just edit and it would make it much more enjoyable.

A good thought for the topic and body, but the spelling and correct usage screwed all that up real badly.

you never completed any thing in the story. always will tell you later.you could have at least fininshed one story. it sucked

fucking boring story... you got a long way to go .. :((

nothing here...you should determine what your relationship is with Jennifer. If she is your cousin, your're her cousin - not her uncle. Or at least it seems to me. As such I found no story and gave you a 1 star.