All Comments on 'Becoming Mine'

Great story, but the title does not fit it.

Stupid and rather childish story, totally lacking any credibility.

It was nice, got right to the point. I generally prefer longer stories but this short one was a nice change of pace. Sorry for the Annons, they can be rude when they have the courage to not show their face. Please don't be too discouraged by them. There may be room for growth in Your writing but this was a great story imo. Thank You for taking the time to write it and for sharing it with us. Personally i prefer DDlg opposed to incest but the Daddy/daughter ones are easy enough to read past. I love that primal need to breed. That feeling of urgency, the rush without the rubber is just delicious. Anyways, thanks again. I hope future comments will be more constructive in thier criticism. (:

Naw.

Very immature if she was eighteen. More like sixteen or younger. Don’t know, maybe it was a snapshot of a wet dream.

I've teased my dad Rick forever, hoping he would do exactly this! He's scared shitless of bitch mum. I would even keep his baby. I'm 30 now, and I started wanting him....years ago. I'm stacy18_bi at Hotmail. Hit me up...daddy

UGH!

didn't read everything even though reasonably short story . . I'VE DID read bits

read pieces . . I'VE DID absolutely enjoy unlike others . . . . . . . better hurry

doing sequel that'll revolve around Angela learning that Sophie gotten

some action that wasn't from Jason because this Angela goes personal searching

even stalking than discovers that secret than seduces along fucks Sophie's father

- DON'T DARE MAKE THE 3 OF THEM LITERALLY GET IT ON SIMULTANEOUSLY

SOMETIME SOON ANYTIME SOON . . THEY GOTTA KEEP IT ON THE

DOWN LOW PRECISELY WHOM FUCKING WHOM LEAST AWHILE . . . . . . .

gotta make the sequel lot longer than this

This was NOT a seduction. No persuasion needed.

Overall it got the job done. I'd say maybe just run through one last time for spelling errors there at the end. I will say it was short and the story like jumps around a little. Because one minute shes going out looking like a slut and the next shes giving in to her father and having sex. Maybe some more background to there relationship would of helped. Overall the sex portion and wording was great. Keep it up!

Great job!

rope after rope of hot and sticky precum maybe eighty-five gallons in all....