All Comments on 'Becoming Monsters 1: Ch. 07'

Um, it broken part way through page 2.

Not sure why, but on the app that last sentence is cut off half way through the word "potions" before going into a repeat of the intro, then a repost of the entire chapter again.

@moderators I know it took 2 weeks to get this uploaded, but it looks like there was a mistake made with the text and it was ctrl+v-ed twice. Can you either delete the double portion or send it back and I’ll delete it and resubmit.

This is going to be a pain in the butt if it takes another 2 weeks. All I’m doing is deleting the double amount of text.

You seem to have pasted the chapter twice and truncated it somehow. “What kind of recreational potions do you have?”ns do you have?” Definitely seems like an odd place to stop.

Looks like the entire chapter was pasted into the middle of the last sentence. Just fyi

READER NOTE: the chapter was pasted twice. Until the Lit mods send it back, it cuts off on the last line of the chapter: “What kind of recreational potions do you have?”

Loving your stories so much, hopefully they can help you with the reformatting. This is seriously one of the best ideas for a story! Your world building is top notch!

FINALLY fixed! Huzzah! For future authors wondering how to edit on Lit, they do not answer any inquiries whatsoever. The answers are available, just frustratingly at no time did I get, with multiple inquires, an answer in 2 months. I had to trial and error how to get this fixed.

Glad you are getting the answers you, sad not from the people hosting the stories. Keep up the good work.

Im very much enjoying it so far! However, it is quite annoying to have to use a translator on everything in Japanese... Could you add the translation in parentheses??

What's with the instant marriage proposal after just one night when she wasnt even sure she could forgive her? Way too quick, why did Diane even agree? Don't see why they couldn't just start at dating, you know, to get to know each other?

Sudden illogical marriage proposals (and non-sensical acceptance) are one of my biggest plot-contrivance pet peeves...

To answer the previous anon, I'm guessing the insta-marriage is due to being Christian. No sex before marriage and all that.