All Comments on 'Becoming Monsters 1: Ch. 11'

Years after writing this scene, I don’t think I’d write it this way. I was trying for a more normalized scene at the time to balance out some of the other more fantastical stuff. I like it, nothing wrong with the scene, but it feels out of place among the rest of my book and general stories. Not the fact that Honoka is with a guy, but that the tone and pacing feels like I was trying to fit into a genre I really don’t like reading, like I was catering to someone. Which, at the time of writing, I was. Oh well, it works for the story, Philip and Georgia remain important characters through the series.

Double up on "Also" there at end of 3rd last paragraph.

Looks like everyone has some history.

Loving the story.

"Double up."

Haha, that was actually done on purpose. Read my stuff long enough, you'll find I do that every so often with also. I think it is funny.

Mmm… theres also the chance her body will just adapt to all the extra attention and start making even more. Just like how lactation is supposed to work. >: )

Never thought, at my age, I would get a new fetish. but reading your stuff, i may have picked even more than 1. DAMN YOU!

Loved that last sentence. Peter sellers worthy!

Fantastic! The part with the goggles had me laughing so hard I actually teared up. Looking forward to reading the rest.

Movie references from 2 generations ago along with painting visuals that are hard to unsee.... What's not to love? This has got to be an eleven on the enjoyment scaleĺ