All Comments on 'Becoming Monsters 1: Ch. 20'

When writing a book, some chapters are smut filled prose, others character building. I think chapters like this make the other chapters more engaging.

You have me jonesing for the next chapter.

Relevant links for more chapters are on my profile page. Thanks so much for enjoying!

There are a few things that are difficult when it comes to writing and world building. Pace, info dumping, and foreshadowing. The level of depth that you have at your hands is outstanding! You basically created a world where everyone is inside a video game. It is truly inspiring. And with such a sudden change in the world, it rightly creates conflict, which does make itself known through lore and interactions between the main characters.

I'm all for a harem of mythical and fantasy creatures that are given the chance to change physically (Huge kink). The only thing I have to overlook is the speed at which love flows through. It's hard to find it realistic and meaningful. Basically, I just make the excuse in my head that magic is involved. But one redeeming quality that you do bring out is your description of how the other women (Wives) see Honoka. Describing those thoughts and feelings, that does a really good job of describing each relationship between each other. And, I'm sure as I continue to read (oh I will be following) that the relationships in both quality and quantity will increase.

Keep up the great work! You're truly inspiring because now I want to write a world like this.

*Kisses

I think that this is the most imaginative world that I have encountered in a long while, and certainly the most imaginative magical I've ever read about. Keep up the great work!