All Comments on 'Bens Diner'

All's well that ends well!

5

It was a good story. Easy read. I enjoyed it.

I enjoyed this fine read so much, thank you. Your writing is truly excellent. Just the right amount of dirty too.

First and foremost, you absolutely need an editor, especially for teaching you some punctuation skills. The mistakes you're making are taking a lot away from your writing, and sometimes even changing the meaning in ways that you never intended.

Then, while you went to great lengths to build up a new and interesting story line, it all became anticlimactic when you failed to put the same effort and detail into your sex scenes, which left them lacking in passion or excitement.

In short, this read more like a draft than a finished piece of erotica.

This story has it all, love, hate and sex. It also has compassion when Ted dated and paid special attention to Elaine, even if it was a little rough on her. When Ted was surprised that everyone in town knew that he had fucked Elaine, he should have known it wouldn't be a secret for long in a small community.

It's an entertaining and unusual story the way it starts out with the two of them trading insults and snubs. Thanks

100 percent perfect story, it has it all. So glad I read it.

Your BWWM works make me smile the most because they hit home but I love your stories. They make me believe true romance is possible.

Thank you

The story is great I really think it is, and I like the amount of detail you first put in with Elaine, so I was a bit disappointed when Charli only had a handful of lines, but other than that you really can tell a great story.

You, like many others, seem quite capable of critiquing or criticising others on their work when you are unable or incapable of rendering any of your own work for critique. I for one just wish I had the ability to write, let alone the nerve to publish for others to read.

Please keep writing R410a to please yourself and the majority of us who appreciate your talent and effort.

...and I thought it was a very interesting response from the author. Yes, I like your stories, and I've always thought they had relatively few typos, which is why I was looking forward to reading this one. However, the construction and spelling were truly awful in places, which is why I was surprised to read your comment that you had used an editor. I mean, even the TITLE should have an apostrophe in it!

Maybe you should trust your own instincts more, or reread the story after the editor has finished with it (or even get someone else to read it again before publication). As an editor myself I'm disappointed that you had what I would deem a pretty poor experience.

That being said, I still enjoyed the story, and I'm glad that everything worked out for all involved.

And I enjoyed it very much. As far as editing problems that others have commented on, I guess I just didn’t notice. I think I was too busy just taking in the content of the story. What’s that old saying about’Forest for the trees’, or somesuch?

The story line was great and has a good pace. I loved the way you developed the people, it made me feel like I was one of them as the story developed. I can see you developing one or 2 more chapters to this story.

Thanks!!!!!!

42Woodie

Yep, another stellar effort! 5 stars

Dear Author, Great story, again. Thank you, jntiques/john P.S. I'm staying on your page until I've read them all!

really enjoyed it.

good ole values. what a woman knows and what she wants.

what a bloke wants and realises that it can grow into something like this

good on ya mate.

Loved every bit of this story. Wonderfully done. Thank you for publishing. 5 stars.

Love the story but the guy dresses like deep Appalachia country 30 years ago. A vest and an 80s shirt, come on.

It's fun mining your stories for giggley little nuggets like this:

"....soft souled black loafers.".

Think I bagged 7 gems from this story. Well done. Keep up the funny work.

A very good story, Great build up, and prefect positioning of sex. Thank you.

I'm hooked as a person could only be after reading almost all of your stories. I still have a few left to read, but I'm sure they'll be just as great. Keep up the good work. I like it where you tell a story as a buildup. Letting the readers get to know the caricatures' first. Then you let the sex just flow in as a natural next step. If you had a 6,7, or 8. on your rating star chart, I"d give you an 8 plus.

TED IS JUST A MANWHORE

Great job, thanks for sharing.

Great Story. For a while, it had me wandering what direction it was going. 5✨

The guy is country come to town with what he thinks is class

[19.11.22]

Tres Romantique!

A multiple read story!

11/10!!!!!

Fucking Elaine....whatever rings his bell

A different twist, but just as great as all of your stories are. 10 stars.

You keep writing these great stories. I can't wait to read some new ones. I've read all of them now. Hope to see some new ones soon. another 10 stars.

Good work, Red sounds like my ex but she's never be stateside so there must be something in a twin somewhere, 5*s man

A nice quick story. Done very well. Thank you. Ten stars.

Story was good except for the fucking of Elaine part

Like all of the rest of your stories it was great. A good 15 stars.

Another enjoyable series! 5*

Excellent. like the early meetings at the Diner, Basketball game and kissing booth before they got together.

Another damn good story!!!

Nicely done, thoroughly enjoyed it! 5⭐️ cheers, Ppfzz