All Comments on 'Bessie's Island Pt. 02: Christie'

I love ❤️ these stories,that don’t start with a penis in the partner’s mouth. Although I have to admit he was more patient than I could be!

Jeep on the good work.

J C the P

The pre-story and add-ons made Part 2 worth the redundance.

Plus, the journey was more enjoyable with fewer rocky passages.

I'm game for Part 3...if there is one?

I ran out of patience.

The sentiment at the end ruined the dynamic of the stories progression. It almost feels like she’s stringing him along and toying with him. She needs to get herself right before entering an adult relationship.

Sorry, but Part 1 got a 5, this scraped a 3.

I was hoping to see an expansion of the story forward in time. Instead most of these meagre pages were a paraphrasing of Part 1.

There's good bones here, but it's disjointed, switching back and forth in time, and then covering some of the same ground again, with no real ending.

There are also several typos that were distracting.

I think what I wanted more of in this tale was was thoughts, feelings and speculation and motivation. Without these, it reads (along with some others on lit), like a list of interesting things which happened to the protagonist - the bones of a story that need fleshing out.

I agree with earlier comments re this chapter just being a rehash of pt1, it doesn’t actually move the storyline forward at all, it only serves to flesh out a few extra details about her life, a lot of which is not relevant to the relationship with Martin except as why she was somewhat gun shy about intimacy and commitment prior to the trip to the island. 4⭐️ is generous tbh.