All Comments on 'Best Birthday Surprise'

Best sister and birthday present ever.

I like the way you made it flow.

Your sister was right, you were too soft on Alice. I hope there is a sequel or a multi chapter series.

Well done.

Luckily for me it didn’t quite venture into “little” territory. This was beautifully written and flowed very well.

Age Play is one of my hard limits. Intellectually I know there’s nothing wrong with that kink (DD:LG/ littles) for me it’s more of a knee jerk reaction that puts it firmly in *ick* territory. Still that just puts the onus on me to make sure that I’m careful about what I read.

Best of luck, am looking forward to reading more of your writing, thanks for sharing.

Tess (UK)

This story needs more chapters. Great writing!

Great start but IMHO a weak ending...even though he wasn't into BDSM there were other punishments he could of come up with, such as denial, frustration and teasing which would have been hot.

To Harga...there is more coming. :)

Cute story, but wish the "gift" had to undergo an enema or two before the birthday boy went "deep diving." It certainly would've added another element to underscore her very submissive role. As for another chapter, your choice but let's add to the kinky zest of the story if you do so.

I’m not big into BDSm but this was effin hot!