All Comments on 'Best of Intentions Ch. 01'

Nice writing style...

It sure needs to be continued. You did a great job on it. Thanks for the entertainment.

Great introduction, good writing. Gave it a 5!. All is sweetness and light; birds sing; rabbits rub noses! Next comes the story with complications, twists and reversals. Can't wait!

please continue. ***** (5 stars)

Ch 2 please!

I want to thank all who took the time to comment. I really appreciate it.

Baron

Five.

Very good start of what appears, so far, to be a excellent story. Thought at first it was going Phyllis' way, so the married (oh where will this go) younger sister was interesting. Keep writing!

very good.. thank you. I have a great pleasure from reading this story. Cant wait for chapter 2!!!

and judging from the movie reference, this is in the 70's. so i see a long set of follow ups coming , and i await them with interest

I love this story. The pace is wonderful!

I would really love to see Maggie telling her soon to be ex-husband that she is pregnant!

Waiting for more ! Thank you

I also look forward to seeing a future where these two are together happily and with a child. Cant wait for the next chapter.

"The pathway to hell is paved with good intentions" ? ? ?

B,

I (we) agree, write on. Storyline, style, clarity this is good and look forward to #2. Thanks for sharing on Lit.

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My research indicates that Samuel Johnson wrote "Hell is paved with good intentions."

Over the years it seems to have morphed into the Road or pathway to hell.

The word “Fuck” should never be used in a romance story. Todays societal use of the word is most often in the negative or derogative meaning. Therefore, in my humble opinion, the word takes the specific story instance straight to the gutter and doesn’t reflect well on the writers available vocabulary. Good story thanks

Another incomplete story

Speaking as a former virgin, if this were realistic he would have cum in under a minute that first time, but recuperated for round 2 in no time. 5 stars, though.

I agree with Phil.

The word fuck should not be used in the body of a romance story. It is an extremely emotive word used correctly. But the connotations of naughtiness , dirtiness and immature teens misusing the word create anything but a picture of romance. It is a real turn off when I read it in the main body of the story. It somehow degrades the whole scene.

It can be used if the author is trying to differentiate between passionate love making and serious vigorous animalistic fucking.

If the author wants to use the word, it is ok to use it as part of speech. That is a character can use it use in a sentence.

The same applies to the word cunt.

There is very little that turns me on more than hearing my prim and proper wife asking me in throes of passion to " Fuck my cunt".