All Comments on 'Bet Your Sweet Ass Ch. 01-02'

Compared to other writers here, your spelling, punctuation and grammar is spot on.

My only slight criticism is that it's sometimes hard to work out who is speaking because you put the person's name at the end of the paragraph, not the beginning.

Please upload more chapters ASAP.

Three pages of nothing. Nothing about who won and what happened after.

Chapters 3 & 4 should get the game played, 5 & 6 finding and moving into a house,

7 & 8 the pregnancy (or pregnancies)

Actually you could dang near hit 15 or 20 chapters

Can't wait for the next chapters.