All Comments on 'Betrayal Ch. 01'

D.T. New pen, new lines and a new story line!.

Very good, don't stop now!. many thanks..

Very good, but fantasies are suppose to be left in the bedroom. I guess he did, but he left them with his mistress. What a turn on.

Good story, good writing. I'll be back.

Too bad I can't give it a 200. The quality of the writing - flow, dialog, character development - is far above the level of what usually pass for top stories around here.

Doesn't surprise me, though - once I had looked at the author's name. I've read some of her other work (in other places on the web) - she is consistently good

your ability to write has been proven with this short story, I hope to see more of your work in the future.You have a very believable story and the characters seem true to life.I think this will be a very good series, and hope to read more of the adventure....Rich

Decent story but 1 thing the wife don't work for the government so she can't freeze his bank account that hurt your story