All Comments on 'Better with You'

WTF ? Sorry but totally confusung, so Poppy is the father ?

So Where is the erotic build up and story ? Basically " poppy " is shagging his daughter ? Granny walks in , she dies , poppy get a GF , dumps her and goes back to daughter ?

Ok so your imagination is zero , but thats no excuse for having someone called " Poppy " as a character

Your story leaves much to be desired but was not a complete washout. Paragraph two clearly defines the familial relationship between granny (mom), son (father), and daughter (granddaughter). So that is not an issue as stated by the previous commenter. However, his other point can be well-taken. There is not much depth to the story which, I am assuming, was written to illustrate the conflict that Poppy (BTW, there are many better ways for a daughter to refer to her father!) experiences as he tries to decide who his loyalty belongs to. Daughter or lady friend. You have four people here…the possibilities for interpersonal relationship, both social and sexual, are almost endless and could have, should have been expanded and explored. Be creative! An editor/ proofreader will help you greatly. Your writing is fraught with poor grammar, run-on sentences, etc. Thanks for your time and effort and keep writing! Three stars

Get it girl. This story was amazing and written so well. Fully enjoyed!!!

Must agree with the other comments , 3 stars and that's being generous...

I recall the first time my daddy and I started our relations ship that was 15 yrs ago i'd just turned 20 and it was a total surprise for us both.

What an inquisitive old bitch grannie to just enter anothers home and walk around like a fucking thief!!

Grannie should mind her own business

Is the asshole Poppy going to keep Jayne on the side??!!

Poppy was 57, his daughter 35 and they were in an incestuous relationship!! They were middle aged and older so why the fucking issue with Grannie!!

That old bitch grannie should fuck off