All Comments on 'Between London and Brighton Ch. 02'

At first I forgave the clumsy writing and was willing to go with the flow of this, but it reads too much like a man's fantasy. It is a disgraceful representation of lesbian relations, basically misogynistic and degrading. It offended and insulted when you clearly meant to tease and arouse.

Keep trying. You have some ability but missed the bus with this one. Wasn't believable. The characters weren't likable.

The flow of the story is choppy and not very realistic. Everything happens to this one female. It's like Murphy's Law on steroids. I did not care for it much. However, I would like to encourage you to continue to write.

as a man i found this to be childish, she is fucking around and gets mad when she finds her girlfriend doing the same thing with a domme?

can't wait for the next episode