All Comments on 'Beyond the Borderline'

Emotionally, this kid's just about as fucked up as a soup sandwich - his cloying obsession with his mom is beginning to get quite irritating - Considering all the traumatic events surrounding the grand parent's death, the dipshit kid has a constant hard-on? - At this point I'm getting more than a little disgusted with Ricky's character - Finally pp9 which illustrates that segue is definitely not your long suit - The interplay between the two of them has become so saccharine as to become almost unreadable - What's with this 'mommy' shit? They're not ten year olds - Sorry, this is as far as I go with this tome . . . . 2/5

I picture the MC wearing a fedora saying "M'lady"

I too have to agree that this story was far too long and repetitious you could’ve easily condensed this by 10 chapters and still had the same effect plus it only took nearly 20th chapters before he actually fucked his mother what the hell..I could see where you’re trying to go with this story that for me, it was poorly executed..⭐️⭐️

The language/style at the beginning of the story is not befitting a teenager. Could be that it's meant to be a story told at a different age.

At any rate, not most natural. Not flowing easily. "those wonderful garments that cover her special parts". Hmm. "Frantically, I rushed to obliterate all traces of my transgression."

Kisses are furious. Ejaculations are in the underwear.

Tapped out 2/3 of the way absurdly long

too long, i wasn[t interested in reading a book ... and it lacked erotism ... i found it a little flat and boring .... not enticing but then it wasn't written by an experienced man who knows how to put forward ideas of pure lasciviousness

I'm speed reading, skipping sections but still it's been very slow star, I don't know if I can keep going, currently on page 5. Will comment further if I did finish this

In high school I approached my older sister and confessed my desire for her. It started out with me giving her this adult erotic novel/book. Greenleaf was the publisher of these adult novels. The theme of this story was about a brother and sister who ended up becoming lovers. I gave the book to my sister Maria and told her that she couldn't whisper a word to anyone about me giving her the book or what I was about to say. I told her that the man in me wishes that we were this couple.

We ended up becoming lovers and moving away to another country to live a husband and wife. And to start a family.

This story reminded me of the first time I looked into my sister's eyes as I came in her and told her that I wanted to be the man who gave her babies. She also felt the same way.

Beautiful love story. A bit long but still a great love story.

Simply Wonderful!!

(3/25/2023)-I am fascinated by well-written stories of Incest. Mother and Son; Brother and Sister are at the top of my lists. I have read several from both categories in the past and have favorited a Shit-load of stories that i have enjoyed reading so that i can re-visit them later. I have commented on other stories that i enjoyed and remarked how a particular story is on my list of "Most favorite" list. Since i can't save it as such on LIT, i have to do it old school on paper; the "favorites of my favorites" i suppose. This story is going on that list with a double **. Just when i think i have read the Very Best on LIT, along comes a story like this one and just Blows My Mind. When i started reading this one about a week ago, i didn't expect what i found. I had looked at the overall rating of 4.72 and figured it would be good and i am baffled as to why it's Not higher. This is A 5🌟 in my opinion.

I continue to be Amazed at this Author's (et al) vocabulary/knowledge level such as the use of terms to describe foods, drinks, places, events, clothing styles/combinations(especially women's when the author is male), academic settings and degrees, etc. Now some of these may be fictionalized but they are No less impressive. But one term in particular that the author used intrigued me; that of "djam karet". I couldn't help myself other than to look up the meaning and, of course, it is as the author had stated in the text. Not that i doubted the author.

One final thought i have on a story this Good and this long is how long did it take this author to write it it?? I can't even begin to guess. Awesome job👍.

Oh my freaking God. This is so well written that it keeps you interested till the very last moment. The premise is so well. It starts slow at the same time pleasing to read. Amazing buildup and beautifully crafted love between the son and his mom. It has to be the best till date. No ratings are enough for this masterpiece.

One of the best written stories on lit....mind blowing....amazing read......hats off to the writer....PM me to discuss more on this.... axbycz7890@gmail.com

This is an unbelievably great incestuous love story between mother and son. The depth and breath of character development is literary in nature. The incestuous emotional and psychological development and growth of the characters, mother and son, is probably the most accurately described in any story of this type I have ever read. The emotional trails and struggles of the characters to finally accept their relationship is logically developed and believable. I believe this story truly reflects how an incestuous love between mother and son develops and matures in a real world/life situation.

There are quick wank stories and there are longer stories that become literature. This is the latter. I favorite very few stories and this is one of the best.

I also appreciate the extended prose. It mirrored the mom’s pacing and allowed for plot twists to happen without being jerked around like one is on a badly designed roller coaster.

This is also one of the few stories I’ve reread and it gets better each time. Kudos. Now off to reread part 2!

Great story. Well written. So very long. That who thing about being caught nearly fucking should have just been dropped. We then had the lengthy step backwards, to then get back to what already took twelve pages to get to. Rickie's mom was a tease and made him wait way too long to finally get his cock into her pussy. After pages of making out, doing everything except fucking, they should have been fucking for five pages, at least.

Loved the build-up! One of the very few attempts on this site to realistically construct how such a relationship could happen between two people who are not mentally ill/disabled. Still, once the relationship got physical things started going downhill. The initial sex scenes were hot, but soon they became very repetitive. Eventually, I started skimming over them. The story (including part 2) then turned into sort of pro-incest propaganda about how such a relationship could be healthy and normal. Overall, the build-up and the characters were great, but it went on for way too long and suspected an agenda on the part of the author.

Author showed good and bad sides of the incestuous relationship between mother and son that is what I liked. It is great that author showed what is really like to be in such kind of situation, it is pain and also happiness

Holy SHIT this was incredible! The best incest story I've read since Having some Brie! This was brilliantly told, expertly paced, and quite frankly written better than some popular novels. This is, overall, a goddamn MASTERPIECE.

That felt like it just dragged on and on. So much cock teasing followed by too much drama. 'will she say yes, will she say no, will she say yes, will she say no" Meanwhile she was "should I, shouldn't I, should I, shouldn't I?" Beautifully written but I think that 6-8 pages would have made it feel less long winded because I finally got to the point where i thought "who cares."

I love this story! It's absolutely fantastic. Grabs a hold of you, and won't let go. I'm just glad I have enough self control, that I was able to read for a while last night, then go to sleep, and go to work, and then finish. I almost didn't, and kept reading. Would have been a hell of a day at work...

Too fuckin long for a build up. First fuck at page 22!

I love it.

I think this may be the best story I’ve read on this site irrespective of genre.

I can think of only one other that had me walking around during the day anxious to resume the tale. The romance, the trepidation, the raw emotion of it was enchanting.

Also, and this is no small thing, all of that build up wasn’t ruined by uncharacteristically dirty talk or acts totally unaligned with the established character’s nature. Sure, there was new stuff. It’s all new to them, but a good number of stories devolve when it comes time to reveal the sex.

Kudos.

Your descriptions of female orgasms makes me suspect you are female. That being said, your writting is excellent.

What a wonderful story, your description of her pussy the way he fingered sucked and eventually entered her was so sexy. I loved the fact that they both enjoyed having their bum holes fingered

Your discription of his body especially his cock was again very sexy and I was hard reading it. Must admit to touching myself and getting very hard and wet

Thank you for the pleasure as I cum off so good

This story is Oedipus wet dream.

Last few chaps drag a bit - but do enjoy this wonderful loving. Incestous relationship between mom and son! I liked the addition of Marcia and son -clever way to bring couple together! Hope there can be further interaction with these two incestous couples (would have been exciting to hear how Marcia and son came together).

I am anxious to read chap 2! Hope you continue writing and sharing your well written stories here! Many thanks!

It is a little long,but it is damn good.Very good build-up and story-line

I'll give 4.9999999 for this story, It was perfect if there were a little watersports. But nothing cant be perfect in this wold, right?

After page 3 seen this dragging on so just stop and read bits here and there and I stick to my comment too long and dragged on.

If ever there is a rewrite or editing, based on all the comments regarding the length, splitting these 28 pages after the 4th of July would make for a more manageable read. And imho, Marsh and Shawn were not needed and added nothing to the story.

.... not just a two or three page stroker. The characters are totally believable, the hormone riddled teenager and the career woman totally cognisant of what is at risk both career wise and socially. Add to that the emotional tug-of-war caused by her desires for the relationship, but her fears if it doesn't last, and it becomes very easy to live the take with them.

Excellent doesn't really do it justice.

All incest should result in inbreeds though. It's the perfect way to true taboo love

Long selfie seminar fantasy. could be worse than that clumsy London mayor.

This is the second time that I have read this story it just gets better with age. Keep up the good work.

It is very nice and long romantic love story between mom and son.

At start of story son is lusting for mom. Mom is very understanding and looks it as teenage phase of boys life and takes it normally. But boy is in contineous serch for moms body and love. He want sex with her.

Hard to believe this is the authors first book! Loved it and marked as my favorite!

Wow! An amazingly well written story! Hot and precise! I cannot wait to read book two!

L

I wanted to finish this story, but it's way, way too long. It seems well written, but I want to read a story in one sitting, not over several days. Sorry.

yes the starting parts where his mother consoles him that its NORMAL for a teenage boy to have crush on women and the way she redirected his energy into positive things is awsome. If my mother is alive she would have done the same thing to me too. This stroy reminded my mother her love and her care. Only the last parts gave some confusion and i am not connected well but i love this story so much.

Three times I was going to stop reading this story. For me it was becoming too boring in parts but decided to finish. ONLY to find that it's to be continued. Holy crap..The build it was far too long and a lot of unnecessary crap in it. The 28 chapters could have easily been cut by 10 chapters. The story line itself wasn't to bad and if it's to be a marathon, the story itself should have finished when it did..Sorry for the negative feed back but 3 stars from me..... I only hope the sequel will be a lot better..

Good story but way way way way way way way way way way way way too fucking long!! It did get dull to me as I just wanted to finish it. I think it took me five days to finish lol

A Very Well Written and thus a told story !!! To get involved in the story line

and enjoy the all the turmoil.. arriving at a very good,... climax !! Ah.. Remember ,

A good story is all about pacing.. OK, so to some the story too long, In some

parts I think of as too much not needed info. I still think it is Very Well Written

Story !!! One thing more, What was the Biggest Challenge ???

Patience.... It appears.... Not many have it when it comes to reading a

story like this !!!!

I don't know... 18 pages to make it to the encounter and it's a big let down.

Also the main character is described having sexual activity at 13. How does this not break the rules, because it was solo? Gave it a 4 for the build up.

fuck me running... I felt I would die of old age before I read all ... how do I get back to incest story main page ?? im very lost ? I gave a 4 and ill go attempt to read next novel.

it became boring

Hell fire, this psycho was so in love with his mother, he needed help. bad, and his mother purposely made him get weirder and weirder. Lucky for her she didnt find another man, for her son was too possessed with her, that he be dangerous to her, if she found another beau. Beau is short for boy. He can still love his mother, and also get free pussy and be happy. But this isnt a lusty sex story, this guy is a stalker if I ever heard of one.

I normally read Non-human but decided to take a dip in the incest world. You should read Jaz Cullan to learn that you can ruin a great story with TOO MUCH SEX. Not every session of fucking moves Heaven and Earth. I am going to start book 2, not because his cum tastes like whipped cream, but because I am intrigued by how they are going to handle the new social interactions.

The buildup was really amazing, but once they started mutually having foreplay, it dove. I didn't really find it erotic. And once they actually became lovers it dropped even more, the comical sexual jokes and innuendos didn't really do it for me. Plus the need to reinforce that they were romantically together calling each other "lover" every other sentence was down right annoying. It picked back up near the end though when they were reminiscing, and told Marsh how they were together.

I read the whole thing.

yes, it was an interesting story, but it just kept going, and going, and going. it took forever for them to even get together emotionally.

Have actually only read the first few pages so I can't really comment yet. But I thought I would point out a minor technical error. The collision with the tanker truck that killed the grandparents couldn't have happened on the Taconic Parkway since trucks aren't allowed on that road (roads designated as "Parkways" in the NYC area are restricted to passenger vehicles only).

here was rimming of the ass there was tounging of the ass even fingering of the ass which led me to believe that they would do anal but other than that it was beautifully written exquisite taste in humor and character development I think you should continue the second book this way and hopefully it has some anal

I'll admit it, I'm a sucker for mom-son romances. I love that emotional interplay. If it's well written (as this most surely is) and if the sex scenes are well done (which are near perfect here), I'm happy. I'm also really, really impressed. If anything, this is under-rated at its current score. Going on to Book 2 now and very much looking forward to a great ride. Respect.

I loved this story. I'm a man but you almost made me cry.

From the introductory paragraph: "This is my first attempt at "creative" writing of any kind."

This is your "first attempt"? I bet OP is a somewhat well-known author hiding behind an alternate identity. You can't fool an experienced reader. I really enjoyed the story. In the early chapters, there are the issues of over-detailing and exaggeration which always plague the erotic genre (especially for a writer attempting it for the first time), but I can ignore those. It's an amazingly well-written story. I think the best I have read on this website. It's just that this is nobody's first work.

Can't seem to stop reading this over and over lol. Such an amazing story. And for those who want to wait awhile for book two, yeah, don't. Book two is far more better than this one, which says alot.

Don't really like how it ended here i got the feeling that Tyrone is going to fuck his mom not looking forward for book 2

28 Pages means if search for words or Phrases - obviously you have them but up to reader to search for them. How inconsiderate of the author - not to mention lazy. PLEASE show the story in maybe 28 chapters so if searching for a specific phrase know where to find it -- or would that be considerate of the author and therefore unable to do.

This the most amazing story I have seen here, I am about to look at Book 2.

The way this story has so much detail and builds up is fantastic. Obviously this is not going to be favoured by those wanting a quickie but there is enough great sex in it to keep you going forward.

I almost quit reading it about chapter 18 or 19 because Mom vacillated so many times, it was getting boring at that juncture. I knew they would get together but I was getting tired of her starts and stops. It is a great story but I think I will wait on BOOK TWO for a while. Thank you for writing.

I liked it but i gave up to read after chapter 8, too much runaround...

please do not cut anything out, it's your story and it all pertinent. Plus the length is a strength, not a weakness, and it shouldn't be broken up into pieces. (people need to learn how to use Bookmarks).

GRRRRRRR --- This is way too good to be made as a Porn Film; it should be made as a full-length, feature film. No IFs, ANDs, or BUTs!! 5 part Mini-Series

This story morphs from Incest to Romance; and after realizing it, my ONLY concern is that at some point they should start calling each other via petnames like "honey, luv, dear" or using their actual names instead of Mom or Son (they can not make a mistake). They're growing closer together as soul mates / lovers, so everything starts feeling better, not worse. It almost feels "wrong" to call it Incest or a perversion.

I have to assume that in many Incestuous relationships; the fact that they're Blood Related is what drives the sex, because it's Taboo (this was only slightly present in this story). It's a thrill to be doing what is wrong, to think that they might get caught.

I have many female cousins and nieces; for 50 years I hadn't been interested with any of them, never considered Incest myself. However; I recently met a niece for the first time where it feels completely different. Whenever we're around each other; we just seem to gravitate to each other. Sometimes while looking at her; it feels like I'm looking in a mirror. We seem to want to hug / touch each other all of the time. She'll start attacking, wrestling, tickling me, etc... and my entire body lights up like a Christmas tree (my muscles will literally lock-up), confusing as all hell. As a matter of fact; when we move apart it actually hurts!!! Tears my guts out cause I know we're NOT supposed to act on it; so I can see what these two lovely people are dealing with ... DKP

One of the best stories I have ever read. Real well written and erotic.

If I could rate this 5 stars 1000 times it still wouldn't come close to expressing how incredible this story is! At last a proper story with real depth! Everything about this story was perfect. You have a true talent!

You are a very talented writer. Thank you for sharing this story. I'm going to chapter 2 right now.

This shit is some motherfucking dynamite. I am on page 10 but I don't need to read the rest to know that this will be my no. 1 favourite story in this site by the time I finish reading it. Excellent. Amazing.

Finally a real story!! Not a slam, bam, thank ma"am!

Romantic, evocative, and sexy as hell. Well done.

Oh my God, That was so dang sensual and real feeling. I have had so many fantasies that were put to words in your writings. I loved it and stayed hard so much of the time reading it. thank you so much.

love bk 1 because bk 2 i so much depressing : / i wish it ended : and they lived long and happy in vancouver ;CC

I loved this story. It was exciting, romantic and fulfilling. You write from an obviously deep literary base. I'm much impressed and so glad to have happened upon this story. I'll read all you write. And ... if you're ever in Indy...

Half way through I began constantly yearning for this to be a movie I could own and see over and over. It makes me curious about myself. I've never had any incestuous experiences, and don't have any memory of any desire in that direction. So why is the story so strongly moving, erotic and compelling? I think, perhaps, it is because of the uber depth of love, the maximum in commitment and "my person", the ultimate of bonded attachment. A stirring romantic experience. I'd like to know who all agrees.

dont listen to the critics, the slow buildup was perfect. (never listen to horny critics) ps:is it actually possible for a guy to cum two times in a row? (pg 23)

not just a long build up, it became boring.

and if you want it to be believable you need it to be time conscious. 20 years ago they didn't have thumb drives, high speed internet, etc.

authenticity requires relevance.

Length isn't quality; rather, it's more patronising. The storytelling was on-and-off. I got to page 4 and then started skipping. You also need to put commas before people's names.

... i'd like to see a statistic on how many times the general phrase "my penis is a little above average, about 8 inches" pops up on this site. haven't read the story or rated it yet, but I saw this reference while scanning and it kind of made me chuckle.

The story was erotic but too slow. At times it seems like you were in a pissing contest against yourself, how long you can prolong the story before getting to the sex. All in all: great story but about 40% too long.

fantastic story!

i've always wanted to see stories like this...hope more is coming!

Great story in many ways. I saw the real parenting in this story. Its difficult to read all the pages at a time but the narration made it. A perfect, dynamic and confident women was depicted in this story. As a single mother jenny is done her job well and did everything for the growth of her son. Only once he become a full grown man and she understood that she is the center of his life and she allowed him. That too not just in a submissive but like a real women she teased him played with him and given her love. I most admired the way she taken him as her lover but still holds her respectable mother position. Really wonderful story.

I gave you a 4, because of the length. It was a good story, but you should have cut it

in half (10 to 12 pages). I would have given you a 5 if you would have had someone

to edit "Beyond the Borderliine." Actually 10 to 12 pages is less than half.

Lucky-Lyndy

You need a better way to navigate. I ran out of time at section 14 and to get back next day, had to work my way through these 14 parts before I caught up.

Break it up with separate chapters where You go back to the index not parts which follow on, not every time.

I really recommend that you show this story to a porn movie director or something cuz this is some real excellent cock-raiser for all sons and moms. This story made me horny and eager to read the next one. Highly skilled, elaborated piece of imaginative work. Certainly the best story ever...

This is the best story I have read in a long time, its my favorite subject and I cant wait for the next part .

By the way I hope you keep turning out this type of story (I know it takes a long time to write stuff this good).

May your brain an heart keep up the good work congradulations fan-fucken -tastic.

Make a PDF

Your ability at creating believable characters, logical plot, ability to manipulate the English language, humor are just some of the things that make this such an excellent work. I am a 76 yo man and know many of the places and things that you mention. I accept the remainder as real because they sound real. You write like someone who has written and publisher mainstream fiction or even non-fiction. It's such a breath of fresh air from the 2 page nutbuster that ends with "and they lived happily ever after" or the last cum shot. Thank you. I will read all of your material can in the near future.

This story inpire me to be a incest author. u are really awesome. Nice from you. thanks.

To the author - I salute you sir for you are a genius with stories. Reading your epic is more enjoyable than sex.

Hope to see more from you in 2013!

By far, the best story I have ever read on Literotica. I hope you continue writing these type of stories.

i normally give a story 3 or 4 pages before i decide if it is going to be worth reading... i DID like this until page 6. started to hate it at 12 but said.. i will give it 1 more page... now i am headed to chapter 2....VERY WELL DONE 5 STARS

Your Story is rare.

Your Medium is rare.

Your Story is well done.

Mom is Elect ra complexing.

Son is hold up a dead snake with his mom's panties on it and you will get prayed.

You wore out your thesaurus as my dictionary was getting dog eared.

Rolling on the floor laughing out loud.

Your story was great by the way and hope you have a good sense of humour.

congrats. This story is wholesome as eating mom's apple pie.

Praise, however genuine, can become a little repetitive around here. "Best", "Perfect","Greatest I ever read", or whatever positive chosen, you've probably seen them enough they lose a little of their luster.

My comment is simply this, Why haven't you read this? If its category, I tell you it transcends it. If it's length, you owe it to YOURSELF to find the time and a way through it. If its any of the myriad of perfectly acceptable but sadly misguided reasons as to why this experience will not be one of your own, so be it. If only to rule this story out as not your cup of tea, this should be read. Its exceptional tea, everyone should at least sip it to be sure. *wink*

It has all the usual expecteds of a good story, well developed plot, full fleshed out living breathing characters. What gets me the most though is the choices made. Im terrible at deconstructing everything here. I don't negative it but I do tend to be at odds with the why of what was done. Call it creative differences most of the time.

This is different. You might disagree to the whys and wherefores but damn it if not a page or two later it makes perfect sense. After a few instances of this you start to trust the author moreso than yourself (because he/she knows the full lay of the land) You go along with the madness knowing you'll end up the other side all the better for it. I told you this work was transcendent.

I will admit to not having finished the entire work (1 & 2) yet as it is lengthy and dense as well (I find myself rereading passages not because they are muddled but just because I want to be fully aware of everything going on so I might not lessen the experience for myself later not having focused and "kept up." Even if it should go completely off the rails ( I highly doubt it) it is worthy of a 5 star vote if only for the experience its given me so far.

I know this will seem wordy and perhaps draw ire from fellow readers, commentators, whatever.

So be it.

I invested my time to hopefully make sure at least one or many souls won't pass on this work.

Everyone needs to read it. YOU need to read it. I really can't think of any higher praise or a work here more deserving of it.

Euph

Fabulous! Very hot and romantic mother/son story. Love it.

I've been on Literotica for 8 years now, and this is the best story on this website. I logged in just to tell you how much your work is appreciated.

The tension, the details, the culmination - everything was just perfect!

Please write more! Incest romance genre needs some gems like these!!

Absoultely amazing read. I just couldn't stop reading until I was done with Book 1... Now heading for book 2! Thanks a lot for your effort and keep up the awesome work. ^__^

This is one of the very best stories I've ever read on this site. It's in my Top 5 all time favorites. Great job. 5*****

Brilliant, simply brilliant!

I'm not even halfway through tis and am loving every word. I skipped ahead to tell you that R inspires me- how he deals with his emotions and faces up to the difficulties. Your story has made me try harder in my life. Thanks. x x

I stayed up like the others and lost hours of sleep too. Its so well done as your first work that it makes me wonder if your a professional writer? Definitely one of the best story on Lit.

Looking forward to any work you plan to do work on in the future. Thank you and your editor...this is like 200 pages in word?

Just wanted to say what a story, the depth of detail and the believable storyline.. Thanks for sharing your gift with us.

It's difficult to find words to describe how good this story really is, because all the previous comments have said it all! ... I hope to see part 2 and more of your work in the future! ... Your command of the english language is second to none!!!!

Excellent. Quite different from the usual choices; and now it ends with a new plot. Can't wait for book 2. I like the length. Author, CPBeaudelaire has distinguished himself from the other contributors. OD