All Comments on 'Bible Belt'

Is this a repost of your story or a plagiarized lift from someone else. I have read this exact story before.

Maybe a part two really enjoyed it

That was a fucking awesome tale. Only thing better would be if he had her eat pussy. Or maybe you could write a similar one where the MCs are both girls. IDK. Anyway, just awesome. 5 stars.

Dewey Cheatham

Perfect! If I could give more stars, I would.

Read this exact story before. can't remember when though.

Did you merge your story I had the original 3 favorited but they aren’t there anymore

I like stories to have some credibility, just a touch of realism and this nonsense had none at all.

I'm confused. Did you delete all of your stories and are just resubmitting them for some reason?

I've read this exact story before. Don't steal content, and if it is yours, why repost it?

For those wondering. The author appear to be condensing, editing, and re-uploading all of his(?) old stories. This one used to be in three parts, and it HAS been changed, because (if I’m not mistaken) the original had pieces from the sister’s perspective.

IMO, this is new and quite improved. Looking forward to the the rest of the revamps.

This diffidently a repost

Hey all! This is a repost, as Anonymous mentioned I'm tidying up my page. It used to be a mess. Sorry for any confusion; if Literotica had an editing feature, I would definitely use it.

Special thanks to my patrons, whose support allows me to write stories like this and share them with the world for free.

Dear PanWhoWrites, congrats to BurroGIrl18 and you for your wonderful work. I would like to ask if it is in your plans to finish your masterpiece "Photographed by my friend". Kind regards

Dear PanWhoWrites, Congrats to Burrogirl18 and you for your wonderful work. Could you please let me know if it is in your plans to finish your masterpiece "Photographed by my friend"? Kind regards

@maczoy: Yes indeed! I'm about to post a new chapter to the link you can find in my bio

Clever premise.

But needed more dialog during their sex activities. Do you like jerking my cock? Don't be in such a rush. Slow down. Play with my balls.

Is your pussy wet?

Do you want to see my breasts? Do you like them? Show me how much.

Four stars.

Dear PanWhoWrites, many thanks for your prompt reply, Kind regars

very good

He should have gotten rid of brad more permanently.

Super annoying. I can't stand when a writer repeats themselves over and over. We get it, your Mc is Naive and innocent and his sister is super chaste. You don't need to repeat it like 10 times. Bogs down the story so much I had to drop it.

This reads as if you intended for it to be set somewhere in the United States. Maybe I'm wrong about that and there are "Bible belt" locations in other places too. 🤔 But several small clues ousted you as probably originating from Australia (possibly the United Kingdom). Things like referring to your friends as 'mates' and spelling words like "realize" with an 's' instead of a 'z'. So I guess I shouldn't be surprised that Angel-perfect Anne is a High School senior at 19 years old. In the United States, you're NOT going to find any 19 year old High School students unless they failed a grade and had to repeat it. Students who have their birthdays in the month of July are typically the oldest of a particular class year. They are started on the education program so that they graduate in May following their 18th birthday. Some High School seniors who are born in mid to late June will still be 17 when they receive their diplomas. I hope that this information is helpful for any future endeavors that you may embark upon.

You had a solid 5 from me right up until Brodie became aware that Anne had been programmed against her will. I could easily overlook him taking advantage of her non-consent hypnosis for as long as he was not aware of what Brad had done. But once he knew that she wasn't truly making decisions of her own free will, he continued to selfishly put his own desires first and use her. If you had written that he had undone the programming and Anne still continued their affair, I wouldn’t have reduced your score. I really wish that Anne had consciously chosen to have her brother's baby out of her love for him instead of getting pregnant just from wanton lust. That's a let down too. 4/5

Regarding Literotica.com and editing- (since it was brought up in the oldest comments)

I guess that you haven’t heard, but there IS a mechanism in place for editing previously submitted works. The process is simple and easy.

(1) Make the necessary corrections to your story.

(2) Resubmit your story exactly as before adding the word "edited" to your title. For example, you successfully submitted "Bible Belt". The corrected version is then submitted as "Bible Belt - Edited".

Literotica.com will replace the old version with the new version but still retain the Original Title without the word 'edited' in it. Easy Peasy!

@Scottish: This is an early work, so you're right – my Australian is definitely showing!

The idea (and it's fairly subtle) is that once Brodie hears the hypnosis, he succumbs to it as well, which adjusts his morality as well.

Thanks for the detailed notes!

I enjoyed the story and am looking forward to another installment.

Started well, but the ending was rushed. There was a lot of heat to be plumbed in the situation you created, that was basically left on the shelf.

For the newbies, the Bible Belt (as such) is in Queensland with sporadic clusters throughout the rest of Oz.

I quite enjoyed the story along with the subtle humor.

Well done.

I liked it for what it was. Short and light, no real serious drama or anything. This premise could have easily been converted into a longer, more serious and deep story. After discovering the mind control, he tries to counter it and stop taking advantage of her, eventually getting Brad punished - letting him go just means someone else is going to fall victim to his deviancy. Then his sister, once she is deprogrammed (with her virginity intact), realises her big brother is a special person and worthy of her love and devotion. Over time she slowly tries to seduce him and make him see her in the way she wants him to, which isn't too hard given how close he grew to her. They then live happily ever after, of course it would be in more detail than that. Now that's a story I would love to see.