by SteveWallace
A trivial criticism: "By far, Tori out shown them in so many ways..." Surely you meant "By far, Tori out shone them in so many ways...".
With writing such as this example:
" 'Very. Every girl should have a double strand natural pearl necklace and matching earrings. Diamonds at eighteen might be a little over the top on most occasions, but pearls are always in fashion and they go with just about anything. Also, don't worry, because when the time is right, I do believe you'll see the diamonds again, only you won't have to borrow them from your 'sisters' because they'll be yours.' "