All Comments on 'Bimbo Builder Academy Ch. 03'

I love how you combine an exciting story with intrigue and hot sex, well done!

If I could request, I would love more focus on those amazing tits of natalie's.

Very good and very yummy too! Thank you!

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This is way different from the rest of your work, I can't wait to see what's going on here.

Another great addition to this story line. Just who is actually being programmed...? JT

First of all: I've had a theory about this place since chapter one and it seems to be pretty accurate so far.

Second: while I totally get the need to establish the story and occasionally take things a little slow, I'm so glad we got a little more action in this chapter. So good.

I did notice that, in this chapter, Natalie was described as having blonde hair with brunette highlights, the opposite of how she was originally described. Either a simple switcharoo or maybe this place is making her blonder as time goes by... ;)

The mind control part of the story was well done, ever-present but not mechanical. The sex scene was amazing, detailed, sensual, engaging. Very impressive work, very much looking forward to the next chapter.

Very interesting story but this is off to a very slow start. How about explaining what happened at Denton for starters?

Thank you all for your comments and feedback. I appreciate all of the support, and since I've seen several comments on "slow pacing" I wanted to address those here.

1. This is not a "normal" erotica story. This is an experiment I'm running where I take a fairly traditional mind control trope ("here's this place where we transform women into beautiful, obedient playthings") and actually make it into something interesting --> with plot, character arcs and consequences. (I hope that that background goal is fairly obvious by now.)

2. That purpose means that this story is not a "quick fix." If you are reading it as one, I'm afraid you're in the wrong place. I have other stories that could provide that (the Bimbo Blazer, maybe, or Alpha Eyes), or there are countless other options here on Literotica. I hope you find what you need.

3. Re: Denton. There was one complaint that I haven't explained what happened at Denton. I get it. It can be irritating when an author points to a highly important event in the character's past and doesn't explain it. But for the character (Mitch), Denton was a traumatic experience. The man is doing his best to literally NOT think about it. I'm writing a 1st person story. That means that if he doesn't think about it, I don't write about it. That's also part of what I'm playing with here --> what might it be like to be programmed without realizing it, and how do your thoughts and opinions appear when we actually observe the things that we think (or don't think) about.

Lots of love, and I hope to see you back again soon,

JC

This story feels much different than your other stories. It has so much more depth with the characters. Natalie is the submissive you write so well but also the temptress/seductive. Same with the main character having the reluctant resistance even with know how good it feels but he’s also (even if hypnotized to be) the dominate alpha male you love to write.

To me, I love this story the most so far. Not to downplay any of your others. They’re great, simply not my top interest in context. Your writing is always top notch, very inspiring! I know you have to focus on the Amazon shorts that pay atm but I can’t wait for more of this series and getting to learn all the mysteries that have come up during these three chapters.

First, for the story and sharing with us. I just read your comment on my his chapter and it explains some things. So everything is going to come from first person perspective of Mitch. The reader is going to be a fly on the wall of his mind. Okay. I’m not complaining. I’m happy to understand how to see the story. I’m also pleasantly surprised to not see the story explained in the first act and know what’s going to happen at the end without reading the chapters. In fact, while I had questions in the first chapter, the way you have written the chapters so far makes it difficult for me to predict what is going on. Well done! I only caution you to not overuse the mystery portion. Too much may lose the readers interest. But just enough usually inspires the reader to come up with scenarios that explain it and desire to discover what happens next. That said....

1. If all we (the readers) are going to know is from the direct POV of Mitch, then it’s going to be his curiosity and questions that he’s finds answers that informs the reader what is happening. So based on his experiences so far what is he going to try to find answers to? I’m not going to ask questions about events because of this way you are telling the story. Readers can see what has happened. How do you plan to explain the mysteries through Mitch’s eyes?

2. You mentioned that you had one complaint about Denton. If that was from my questions, I hope you understand that I was not complaining. I like to ask questions both because I am interested in what happens next and in the hope of giving you something to think about that, perhaps, you may not have thought about.

So I will eagerly await the next installment of the series and see where you take us.

Thank you again.

Sincerely and Respectfully,

JAFCritic

Can't wait to read the next chapter.

You can help me...

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What the fuck was that opening sequence?

makes me want to go back in time and modify my missed opportunities...