by AddToWater
To my anonymous friend who wrote a very positive comment about this story: I greatly appreciate the feedback. You definitely loved the story, and you were right: I was as hard writing it as you were reading it. However, I must offer my apologies for the fact that I need to delete your comment, only because you basically walk through the entire story with major spoilers in your comment. I want to keep my readers in suspense for a little while! I hope you understand and continue to read my stories.
Sincerely,
ATW
Love this story. Can't wait to read about the rest of the weekend they had.
Loved it! It made me so wet... especially towards the end there ;) Can't wait for Pt 2!
I enjoyed your story. Thanks for your efforts. Personally, the "my friend" bits though distracted me and don't really add anything to your story. I'd suggest editing them out in future chapters... Just my 2 ¢ though and if you don't agree, I'll say nothing else. Keep writing!
I loved the story! :). Very enjoyable! I kind of hated my parents for making me and my brother go to private school. I can only imagine how much worse it would be for homeschoolers. It was coed, but realistically because of the small size and of course the environment, you either came out socially retarded or socially fucked up. :(. Most of my friends were people over thirty and interaction socially with 'friends' my own age was virtually nonexistent. Living out in the country made it ten times worse. When I moved out and went to college I went crazy! Drank way too much and damned lucky I didn't catch anything or knock anyone up. (Shuddering). ..land to top it off my school turned out not to be accredited with the state so if I wanted a federal job I had to get a GED anyway. Really pissed me off!
Loved, LOVED your story!! I can't wait to see what Pt. 2 and the rest of the weekend will bring for this pair. Please keep up the wonderful writing.
And these two were kind of gross.
Yeah, this story was GREAT!! I was kinda surprised how quickly Adam tackled Caitlin, it was a huge leap from showing her his erection to jumping her and kissing her passionately, but I'm not complaining! hahaha Your writing is great, clean, and best of all, it's sexy without being vulgar and crass. Dirty talk is great, but when the characters seem unable to do anything BUT act slutty (especially the daughters, I hate that), it ruins the romance of it. For me, when Adam thought, "Even when I conceived this very girl beneath me it had only been one of a thousand nights of otherwise routine pleasure with my wife. But now, in this moment, I felt powerful, perfect. As illogical and taboo as it was, it also seemed absolutely fitting that I, as this girl's father, was the one to introduce her to the art of lovemaking. And I had ejaculated inside her, filled her with my seed, claimed her as my woman," the story became perfect. I love the concept of Caitlin being his woman in a way not even her mother could ever be, it's so unbelievably hot! PLEASE get the next chapter up SOON... And yeah, wouldn't it just be amazing if they decide to forego the Plan B pill and accept that she was born to be bred by her Daddy? Mmmmm!! hahaha
Read it before and thought I left a comment and score.
Great story as far as it goes, But you Can Not put a few inches of cock in without breaking the Hymen, Anything fingers or cock that goes into the Vagina within an inch will break the Hymen.
I absolutely love a story with good build up. This did not have that. The entire first page bored me to death. It was so dull that I lost interest. Hopefully, your next one is more interesting.
WOW... eroticaly exciting. This is the second of your stories I read and it is true to form...another awesome story.
Gotta have that chapter3 and maybe 4? She HAS to be preggers!
Disappointed about the possibility of a preggers 18 yr. Old, though. But I loved that the birds and the bees talk ended in them being able to take her virginity though. Now he needs to teach her how to her G Spot works; what anal is like. Then when mom gets home the little girl needs a lesson from mom about the girl side of sex, to include deepthroating. Then mom gets to find out about dad after having sex with her daughter, and it can then be a family affair. Maybe she will come home with a boyfriend that likes mature women... Oh boy.
It was hot and sweet, but... a little fantastical in their dialogue. What I mean is it sounded like you were writing a story. As in, it was not immersive or believable in the way it was written.
That said, it was still quite good.
After reading what another writer said, I never vote except five because votes, especially less than four really hurt your score, and I really like your story except you had to go on about how massive the father was. You didn't give dimensions as I remember, but from your description of his size, I doubt that any virgin would be ready for sex within two or three days. The story would have been just as good if he had 6 inches. Your pointless exaggeration are you a vote of three at the most, in my opinion.
I'm not commenting as Anonymous to hide; I've forgotten my username, since I don't come on this site very often because I'm disappointed by so many stories.
She might have to stick to anal from now on if shes going to forget to be on the pill.
5 Stars. Definitely one of the best stories I've read in a while, nicely paced, realistic and caring, but mom's gonna be so PISSED!
My boss pulled the same thing with her teenage son when he was 18 in 2019 they went on a cruise her boyfriend went to he and her got so drunk she forgot what room next thing after her not being pregnant in 18 to 19 years she found her self pregnant she was so much in shock it took until her fifth month of pregnancy to realize she was having a baby her boyfriend thought they baby is his now you look at the older brother and his three year old brother and you can tell there more father and son then brothers
Realtor training.....for sure Heather is having an affair....MC seems like a wimp when dealing with his wife