All Comments on 'Birthday Girl Gets Lucky! Twice!'

to stupid and unrealistic fiction has to be based on reality this is fantasy and needs to be in that area

I don't know what the other dude was thinking girl ... this is an awesome story!!! Keep up the work - I want to read more and more of your thoughts :)

Thanks!!! :)

Fantasy maybe, the conversation between them was strange as were some of the lines like "grabbing my purse that was hanging on the back of my hair". Interesting place to hang a purse. Or when they went out parking near the "damn". Damn strange place to park I'd say.

Very nice to read about two people who cum together and enjoy each other after what they have been through in the past years and then "Bam".! I can relate to this story.!

Hope to hear more from you in the future.!* Thanks. JAG

The story itself is fine, but the typos really detract from the story. Edit, edit, edit!

Lindsay,

Great story! I had the hots for my older sister years ago! Sure wish it would have turned out as your story! Thanks for sharing!

As someone said earlier...PROOF YOUR STORIES

A number of incorrect words and spelling. Why not a chapter 2? You could build a good second story about his girl problems.

I didn't really like the story, they didn't have any build up. Maybe if you had a second chapter then you could make it better, but right now I don't really like it.

Many drinks later, we were definitely drunk and feeling it, but none of us cared. I had seemed to lose Carla into the crowded earlier in the night and I started to get worried for her. I was able to locate my purse on a bar stool beside me and whipped out my phone and started to text her to find her where about. Just then, a message indicator icon lights up and it was a message from my brother that read "Hey hope you are having a fun time and make it home safe tonight BABE." I instantly responded back to him informing him that Carla had seemed to disappear on me.

no background or character development a sloppily written rush to sex and no end all equal a waste of time and it needs a super editing to boot. delete and stop writing until you graduate grade school.

That was a very hot story, I just loved reading it, I wish I had a hot sister, who would let me to that, what your character did to her little bro, please write more longer build up chapters with lots of really hot & nasty sex talking too, also do not let the critics get u down, as u write more u will get better, just remember the 3 p's, an if u can get sum 1 to proof read stories too, it will help. 5 stars

loved this and would love to read more of these two. hot stuff

Where does the twice come in?