All Comments on 'Birthday Surpise'

by jared4ever

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sshh1sshh1almost 8 years ago
It was ok

Liked it but I think in order to get the reader engaged you need dialogue. I don't like reading monologues unless there's a personal conflict within the narrator. Love the belt around the neck. Love the delayed orgasm. I love gay bdsm stories. So I'll definitely read more!

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