All Comments on 'Birthday Surprise'

Can’t wait for the next gift.

I hope he knocked you up!

And hope there's plenty more incestuous sibling stories from you on the horizon,especially older sis/younger bro ones! Their my fix on account my sister is five years older than me and she my wet dream come true(hehe) we're both single soooo there could be a possibility;)

Who had an erection? A bit more story and some editing would perhaps have been nice. What happened with Karey?

I thought the story had great potential, but, I would strongly recommend getting an editor to review your stories.

There were a few phrases that I found awkward and detracted from the story. Also the story lead was too long IMO.

"I had a fetish for him". To my way of thinking, you may have the "hots" for him, or an incest fetish. But not sure about a fetish for an individual.

The other one was "and I had an erection, wet between my legs.". I thought : WTF, is she/he a hermaphrodite? I get what you were trying to say, but that was definitely not a phrase that I associate with a woman. :-)

I also hope she got pregnant. I also loved her beautiful hairy pussy, she's a real woman. Bro is a bit wimpy for shaving.