All Comments on 'Birthday Surprise'

One or two places were a little hard to follow but it was then easy to figure them out and go on. It was very erotic and kept me wondering what was next and looking forward to reading the next chapter. Thanks

Very glad you liked it! I thought about editing it to make it more accessible/easier to follow, but I decided to go with the exact version that I sent to my friend two years ago. I figured it would be more real that way, and easier to imagine her receiving the story and getting turned on by it. Maybe I should have given some more background in the Author's note section?