All Comments on '#Blessed'

You certainly write well and I do "get" this story, I think, but it's more like an outline with a lot missing. Does this girl hate herself and think she deserves to be punished and/or humiliated? Is she just the type to act out fantasies while safely far from home with men who mean nothing to her? Why is she doing this? How did she invite these guys in?

I would really like to see this fleshed out way more, but well done anyway.

Not deep and not good, and you write as if you've spent your life reading Cosmo articles about the latest fashion trends.

For a first draft, this has merit. The theme seems to be going for some transcending theme effect. The lack of emotion and the rationale for why she invited them to her tiny room needs some introduction. What brought her to make this journey? Seems like a disconnected blogger on a sojourn looking for a cause? a reason to be? a [insert why she is doing this line here].

Mechanically: grammar, syntax, and structure indicate you have a good command of crafting a storyline.

Lit does allow for editing of a story, just in case you want to further refine this one. Just resubmit the story as with your changes adding the word EDIT to the end of the title and note to the publisher area. They will repost it for you. It will not show your original story, but will keep the comments. [Might include an opening note to readers that the post is an edited version so they are aware of the revisions. Otherwise the comments that are presently posted would seem out of place.]

Welcome to the neighborhood BananaFlower.

My writings are under dmallord - not quite in line with the feel of your first story. Feel free to look them up and let me know what you think of those. I enjoy feedback positive or negative as look as it constructive feedback! ;-)