All Comments on 'Blizzard Ch. 01'

Great start, but too short! Need to get to the good stuff before calling it a chapter.

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Enjoyed it! Keep going!

I read a 21 part story that was almost identical to this one.

It's 29 parts, but you may have seen it posted elsewhere on the internet where I have been releasing it as it was being written. If the name tied to it wasn't Redsliver, then someone's been stealing my work.

Kings cup is the same name for sociables. I don't understand you Canadians sometimes 😂. Love the story

1. Why is this listed as Mind Control? The category nearly drove me away because I always worry it will turn into NCR. Seems like it could be Couplings, Group or Romance just as well.

2. Will we find out later about the woman who shows up at the beginning of this chapter? I keep wondering if she is some pixie who granted Gene three wishes and these girls were them. Somehow that doesn't sound like it's the whole story. Was the female visitor practicing mind control on Gene instead?

I'm only 7 chapters in, but there's not a hint of mind control.

Other than that, it's not a terrible story, but is very predictable.

What ever happened to the first beautiful Red head??? I liked her best so far.

Interesting, I must admit I am a little confused by the story. Perhaps I will understand it by reading further.

I have read the entire arc. If you found this first part good you will enjoy the rest. It is well worth reading. I hope to see more one day.

Well what an opening chapter. Loved it from go to woe so looking forward to checking out the rest of this yarn.