All Comments on 'Blizzard Ch. 04'

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Ignore comments about length or lack of sex. Follow your idea through. I'm digging it.

Do not ignore the critics. This is bad. I agree that so far all 4 chapters should be combined into one, as the first chapter. Very poorly written because there is no development of any kind. Who is the main character? Other than his name we know nothing. Every situation is so short and non-descriptive. The best story line was the dinner with the father and even it was rather short. Far too many 6-8 word sentences. And the worst thing for those who are looking for "mind control erotica" is, it is nonexistent. Actually, the worst thing is that the story is quite boring because all we have is a guy trying to get rid of women... not very erotic.

Plenty of jump in sex romps out there, not too many with good stories to tell.

Keep it up.

Apparently people don't know you have already written all 29 parts and likely don't feel like rewriting to make the chapters longer. I'm loving the story and the pacing is nice