by JuanaSalsa
A really well told story, you have the ability to write to a much wide audience.
Good story, excellent establishment of how the magic works in that world. Character development could have been better; all were a little two-dimensional for my taste. And I'd have liked the sex to have better exposition. Not a bad read, but a good skeleton to build on, not a finished product. Keep writing!
This was really good. I like the world build and especially the characters. The penultimate ending was a bit lacking though and I wanted to see that horrible father get his just comeuppance.
I rate few stories, and comment in fewer. The pressence of this comment is an idication that your words are enjoyable to the average reader. Well done and writen. Would like to see a follow up, even tho it is fine being left where it is
This honestly is closer to a mass market fantasy than to a smutty story. Very good and the sex is more a part of the plot than the point of it.
This is some gourmet content. Definitely gonna read the rest of your stuff