by evilbread666
I'd almost categorize this series as non-erotic till you get to the chapter that has it. I'm not against build up but the chapters are short. I would suggest perhaps waiting and making a multi-page story. Also this mystery guy has been her husband, finance, and boyfriend.
Best of luck developing your writing skills.
A slow build up is cool. I am waiting for the next chapter.
Thanks
"I got the vision in my head of making out with her. I would have my head tilted up, with my head basically resting on her huge boobs"... This is so freakin hot. I want this right now! ;(