All Comments on 'Boston to Birmingham Ch. 01'

Actually flyover land (Iowa) is rather nice, professionally, other than the winters. Beats the mass humanity (been there) of the "big" cities. Third time reading this series and gets better with each read.

Her father is probably doing a good thing for her, maybe going overboard a bit too much. What is hard to believe is that he gave Allen a better deal than his own daughter!

idk if you an author or not but this is great, iv read romances and this is one of the best, you get caught up in the story and it evokes emotions from you that is writing, love the characters and look forward to further reading.

First let me say that this story is well written, has a lot of great detail without sounding over-the-top, and the first chapter does a great job of describing in a nutshell the difference between the have some and the have-nots.

That being said I REALLY don't understand why anyone can make the claim that Gwen loves Hardy and deserves to be with him. I don't get how anyone can have sex with someone other than the person you supposedly love. It makes absolutely no sense. Gwen also doesn't respect him, doesn't make him a priority, and expects Hardy to be there for her only when she wants him to be. Her job is more important than Hardy.

Spoiler Alert!

The story is all about Gwen getting what she wants. She does the worst thing you can do to your spouse and then somehow Hardy is the bad guy. Somehow she gets his family to manipulate him as much as Gwen does, in order to get her way, and somehow we are supposed to think an RAAC is deserved? No one seems to be supportive of Hardy. Somehow she is supposed to have changed into a responsible, upstanding person in a few short weeks. This again is complete BS! She doesn't grow as a character. It's all about Gwen and her journey to get what she wants, regardless of who she hurts or what Hardy wants. I'm sorry but that is not how a loving person behaves, and is not what a marriage should be based on.

on to chapter two

Love the tough love. If she survives and perseveres in the job daddy got her, she just might get hardy back...maybe. but she definitely needs to pull her head out of her ass

Just brilliantly conceived and executed. This is one of the few authors in LW who has, not just professional talent, but professional talent at a high level. Read some Baldacci stuff...it's stupid and crude compared to qhml1's writing.

Sorry only 3 stars

2 tours in Iraq

Unless he basically was in non combat duty he would have seen a lot of shit and would have learned to control himself unless his outfit was scumbags and covered for each other if so can't see him coming back college pro bono and church etc unless total psychopath

Nothing wrong with iowa....lol.5

USMC Vietnam vet 2 tours of the

Ignore the trolls, this was a great example of the civilized veneer we put over the primitive some can become in combat. Something can strip it right off assnd we can revert back to that person we made ourselves to service. Very good 5 stars.

I like the old man's tough love approach to his daughter's situation. Tough but extremely fair all things considered. Looking forward to reading the next chapters. 5 stars.

Rereading again one of my favorites just a great story

An excellent beginning, great story line and very well written. It's a 5

But if she's really the spoiled princess, she holds all the cards. Her Father thinks he has a scandal on his hands now? Why wouldn't she hire an attorney and a publicist, offering them top dollar on the payout and threaten her Father with a REAL scandal? File charges against Hardy and against Greg in Court , in Boston. Hardy may have left and Greg may have been banished but a Court subpoena brings them both back to town. Suing Greg for rape and the drugs and Hardy for assault and battery, she has ALL the evidence she needs to create a scandal that might very well destroy the firm and everyone involved. Police coverups, bribes and all sorts of backroom deals would swamp everyone. And to avoid that all dear old Dad has to do is release her full trust to her. Other rewards would also be on the table. The Princess wins. I see that as a very real possibility. Just saying. Thanks for the effort.

More character development, less pointless dialogue and retribution scenes, and this would be great.

Some might prefer more vengence, but it is already way over the reality line

Ends as a RAAC

The only thing Hardy did intentionally was divorce her and glue her hair and hand (nice touch). Her injury was purely an accident. I do find it funny that all the feminized men here suddenly resort to the taboos of 12th Century chivalry when it comes to physical aggression toward a woman, NO matter how evil or dangerous she may be. Aren't women supposed to be treated exactly equally? Since I'm not one of you feminized men, my preference for "chivalry" is at least consistent.

What some of the commenters seem not to notice is that this author has done an amazing job developing characters - not just one or two, but all of them. That is a sign of a superior writer of fiction, which qhml1 is. So far, the father is the most interesting of qhml1's characters. He'll fade as this goes on, and Hardy and Gwen (who will grow up) will come to the fore, along with an interesting supporting cast.

This series should have been published as a novel commercially.

Qhml1 is pulling our legs when he says he drives forklift for a living, right? Does anybody know?

Cheating slut must pay!!! Drugs and Alcohol are NEVER an excuse to cheat!!! EVER!!!

It's easy to criticize, that's why everyone does it! Try finding something right then maybe make constructive criticism. After all you fellow readers, we are getting great stories for FREE! This was/is a great story. Most of the retribution is well justified and in some countries even lawful. The father should have done what he did with his daughter a long time ago. You just can't fix stupid. Spoiled privilege entitlement ruins a persons moral fiber and corrupts their soul. Everyone got what they deserved except the husband who should never have married, but that's what the story is about. Loved it.

I think this is a very nice story. It isn't so much about character destruction, but about character build-up. Gwen needs to learn the hard way, and this chapter is necessary for setting the scene and creating conditions for the next chapters.

Great story!!! She'll blame cheating on the drugs of course!!!

Anytime an author sparks these kinds of emotions in their readers , some of whom become polarized opposites, that is an absolute certainty that their an outstanding writer ! Their characters, story lines , premise , and skill , bring about emotional connections in the reader , whom oftentimes feel compelled to respond to the author emotionally while these feelings are still freshly manifest in them ! Just remember your getting these feelings from a fictional character the author has created from his imagination ! There’s no reason to be distraught or infatuated with the writer his or her self in over their characters in a fictional story ! I don’t get angry or flattered at Stephen King personally over his characters , but he’s so good I do get emotionally affected by his characters , situations , and the directions his stories take ! That’s the rewards of writing publicly , I imagine . And this author has that ability !

Doesn't qhml1 know that AME stands for African Methodist Episcopal? And that y'all is plural, never used when talking to one person?

Can’t wait to read the rest

Very much enjoying it. Looking forward to the rest....

So far so good. Really hope the rest of the series lives up to this first chapter.

Cheating stories tear me up. So why do I read them? Because the themes are simple, the execution excruciating. The characters are what drive them. Like a train wreck, we cannot look away. This is exquisite.

You needed to set this in Lawrence County, Alabama that is the home of the Dixie Mafia. Limestone County is a higher class of people.

Gopher - you are partially mistaken about y'all. It is one of those that can be singular or plural, it all depends on who is talking! Alabama was a great place to live when I was there. I was there long enough to get past the Yankee and Damn Yankee designations!

somewhere east of Omaha

Great work. This could end just there. Well done. Greg is a really good father!! Giving life lessons to the spoiled princess!!

Gopher…..I believe y’all is singular and all y’all is plural.

Great first chapter.

Fantastic character development and plot pacing.

She has a hell of a father, well done

If this is your 1st work you did a great job and hit It right out of the park!

Really I have to say it's great character development and I honestly can't complain about the story had also far.

Really really fine writing super work.😊👍

Read the series again. This is one of the top stories on this site.

Good!

read the whole series before and thought it was great.

Congrats to Hardy and to her father for the revenge-penalty. This is a VERY satisfying story to read: someone finally got exactly what she deserved. Do I think that she will learn her lesson? No.

I would have liked to know what the hospital did with her hand glued to his dick and his hand glued to her breast!!!

6*

BJ

One thing that just struck me on this reading, and I'm not sure if anyone else has mentioned it, is the big deal that took precedence over everything else. Now Gwen and Alan were obviously unavailable, so either the deal fell apart, or, golly gee, somebody else was able to handle it.

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Yes, he drugged her, but after Paris, after "Blond on Blond is Back! after his obvious attempts to come between her and Hardy, how she could even imagine it to be a good idea to let him into the house, and have a drink with him, ESPECIALLY when she's expecting Hardy and their marriage is already on thin ice.

I'm loving diz already

shes a PPOS and dad admits he is partially responsible for the fact that shes a spoiled entitled cunt. But kudos to dad, he stepped up when her fecklessness and immaturity blew up her world and did the tough love thing. now she s a regular lower class peon w/ a good education but no fallback safety net, she has to live like us for a yr then she gets her riches back, we normals never get to stop slaving always worrying about the next personal disaster. rk

I'm not gay, but I think I just fell in love with Greg (Gwen's father) for being the greatest, most stand-up man I've EVER read about in a story of fiction. I did NOT see things going in this direction. The one thing that is stupid is Greg sending his daughter down to Alabama and only 2 counties away from Hardy. A man of his means and status would have business relationships in probably 40+ US States and would have kept them far apart from each other. Hmmmmm....I hope I didn't speak too soon. I'll probably be in tears throwing my laptop against the wall by the end of this story. LOL Actually, I'm willing to bet money that Hardy takes this cheating slut back. She knew damn well what she was doing in France with that putz the first time, but this seems to be the most common ending on Literotica when the wife didn't intentionally burn her husband.

Surprised Gwen let Allan into the house whole waiting for Hardy. I guess she was lonely and stupidly thought him yo br a friend. Interesting that Hardy went full nuclear-powered murder mode, when it was clear that it was not consensual as she was saying stop and trying my to push Alln off her and lightly hitting him. Drugs would be confirmed in her system. And Hardy would respect Greg enough even afterwards to learn thr truth of that day. Of course perhaps he found out about Paris and hence the divorce. The nuclear episode is explained later by his personality issues and his past. Anyways Gwen was an idiot and primadonna. At least they finally reconcile though not before the crap with the other female soldier / agent (the only dumb part of this long story).

I couldn’t finish page one. The author’s problem is not that he doesn’t know anything about the law, which he warned us about. His problem is sentences like this: “…(F)irst she didn't know what she was talking about, and second her life was none of her business.” Who is she and who is her? I don’t like to read fiction that requires me to try to figure out what the author is saying.

Man, the world turned into a shit sandwich and Gwen has to take a huge bit of it. Good for Dad, taking care of things finally. Not sure if I agree with Dad sending Gwen to Alabama so close to Hardy, but maybe that was his plan, we shall see in the next chapters. Five stars.

The story isn't that great and it certainly isn't good enough to support all of the extra words in it. Cut the length in half for the same amount of plot and maybe it'll be worth reading. As is, I was just skimming and it was still drug out almost enough to put me to sleep. I shudder thinking there are 5 more chapters like this.

Excellent story as always, well worth the time⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

You should have set the Alabama part in Lawrence co instead of Limestone co. That's where the Dixie mafia is at.

Second reading, and it's been a while. A superb story, with larger than life characters.

A promising, if slightly worrying start. The ease with which she became a hoe seemed far too incoherent. One moment she's awaiting her husband to come home, the next she's high on drugs having sex in the marital bed expecting hubby to return home any moment.

I like it but it's a little ridiculous Hardy seems to skim over that she was being raped. Even the affair in Paris he was feeding her coke (and who knows what else?). Moral failing sure but not worth him beating her over.

Except that he didn't beat her. I'd have loved for him not to have hit her at all, but the story was pretty clear that it was one blow and it was accidental.

Her first mistake was listening to Allen bad mouth Hardy without pushing back and then refusing to listen to him. She didn't realize he was playing her. The disrespect she was showing Hardy was a direct result. Love this story.

LMJ

Rereading this series. Still think it's about as good as it gets BardnotBard

I loved it, and gave it 5 stars. This is my 2nd time going thru this series, and I loved it the 1st time thru too. These are the kind of stories that are missing in the Cheating wives/ "Loving Wives" forum.

Reading again, what a ripping yarn

5/5 still

Excellent start with a truly awful ending for the main characters. 5

Nicely done, the only issue I have is Crystal Anne isn't mentioned much. As his best friend since childhood who moved to be with him, I would think he would be going to her for advice, company, help, anything really as he goes through a tough period. But she is only briefly mentioned right at at the beginning stating her her intentions and I was looking forward to reading more about her as she sounded interesting.

I loved it. And Allan got what was coming to him too (got busted up in the beating). Maybe that'll teach him for going after a married woman.

Repeat visit. What a great story.

Great story. You even sound like you run a law office.

Damn Hardy went from sensible, charming old school values, to gangsta as fuck at the flip of a switch. 5 stars. Super good, I need to know what happens next.

Amazing story, looking forward to reading the next chapter. Sucks you in and keeps you coming back to read more.

A.M.E. stands for African Methodist Episcopal. An offshoot of the Methodist church founded by Richard Allen because blacks were being discriminated against and mistreated in the white Methodist churches. It was not to bring blacks into the fold.

No sympathy for the cheating cunt

4*

Good story, interesting people

It is very hard to suddenly practice law in a different state, especially in any sort of governmental fashion.

This is one of my favourite stories and i cannot believe the level of idiocy of some of the nitpickers who have commented so far. They should ask for their money back or better yet shut up.