All Comments on 'Boyfriend Test'

Sometimes it's not just the men who are foolish!

5

beautiful story. Loved It

good love story

Sweet, I liked the ending. Wish it was longer and really got into it, perhaps had more than Joellen trying to test him. Just feels like a set up for something more grandiose.

I'm not even going to go there about Wendy and her insecurity and behavior.

I think you could add a couple more lines though.

"They walked to the water's edge and spotted something shiny there, half buried in the mud. It was Bryan's ring..."

Needs a better ending, still 5/5

What fixer said

Thanks for writing

Works for me. Pretty darn good story, even though there was really only one way it could end. A little more story would’ve been nice. Especially the part where Wendy finds out Bryan and Joellen are “together”.

This is a sweet story, well told. That’s a lot of what I want to read here. Thank you for writing and thank you for sharing your work.

Yes, sweet and substantial. My main critique would be to make sure you balance the sex out. It seemed all skewed towards the woman who he ultimately rejected, so we as the readers don't get much of a "payoff" when the story turns.

Similar to others who've commented, I thought the ring might be spotted at the foot of the falls before the story ended.

The sex was also indicative of Wendy's character, taking his attention to her needs first (selfish) as her due.

A short but masterful story, well done!

Good, fun story! I was expecting Wendy to let 'You passed the test' slip BEFORE they had sex. Perhaps it would have come out when they're in bed during foreplay, leaving her frustrated and unfulfilled when he kicks her out. The story could have been a bit longer and described the interaction when Wendy finds out.