by velvetpie
This is one of the better quality stories I have read on this site and I hope you intend to continue it.
You have got to write a sequel or an epilogue or something to let us know what happens in the aftermath
Good but you must edit.
Such as when you changed the name from Kent to Chad. Rafe says "Chad. Chad what's wrong?" Then Chad says "No, just leave me alone, Rafe. Go join Chad..." also there is no comma after alone if it is Rafe is ment to be in the first sentence