All Comments on 'Brain Games Ch. 18'

Wait, how can that be the end? There is more to learn from your great world, but also Zack and Maddie need to go love all the young sexy people in college. I hope to hear more of their story.

This game to an end too quick. It feels rushes, as if you got tired to the story. It feels there was so much story to be told, so much about each character to explore.

It's disappointing

History repeated itself. I liked it. The ending seemed a tad rushed considering the build up. This was an amazing story you built up. I could see this made into a movie. I hope there are more stories similar to this in your head.

I agree with most of the comments below. I loved the story, particularly how you handled the "magic," but the ending was rather abrupt. It left a multitude of unanswered questions and no real conclusion. Even a brief statement from the goddess explaining what the future holds for the hero would have been nice. I also liked how you handled the sexual content. Enough to be sexy but not overwhelming.

Started out good, but adding in personal politics is a story killer. All the chapters before this was good though. Thanks for the read.

I hear that people feel there should be more, or that it ended too quickly -- don't worry! This is only the beginning.

Really liked the series. More feminist (and humanist) than most of what you find in the 'mind control' section. I especially appreciated the spiritual elements and the hint of politics. Definitely not a story killer for me. Given the author's name, I wonder how much of the plot is an extension of his real-world beliefs. Looking forward to more.

Interesting.. I feel like I have read this whole story years before.,, down to the exact ending.. I see that you posted it in May of this year.... Weird... I read about 2400 wpm and have gone through libraries over the past 60 years... I love fantasy/sci fi and I have seen this exact story before.... Ah well very enjoyable read and I look forward to our avatars here having more adventures. One nice derivative would be for our hero to continue healing and helping others. I would be careful though n your continuation of this story line. Keep it simple with a small stable of clearly drawn and evolving characters. The intensive character development is your strength here. The nebulous Goddess religious stuff is somewhat of a diversion that must be only background to the heroic avatar story line. Many times these types of stories have sequels that grow to large in scope and the reader and author seem to get lost in building civilizations to the detriment of your strengths here of quality character development.

I particularly enjoyed how you used and grew Maddie. That transformation was worth the whole story in this reader's opinion. Anyway...a well deserved 5 star and I look forward to a sequel.