All Comments on 'Brainy Teen Ch. 16'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Too long...

The story is amazing and hot buttttttt you take too long to put up each chapter...so it's kinda losing interest I guess... Maybe you should post chapters sooner

ready52ready52over 5 years ago
Getting long

I think you could have shortened the story some by eliminating some of the acts being repeated. It seems everyone is now drugging Wendy. I know it's fiction but realistically how many hormonal teens could hide such a scheme?

I am noticing a lot of grammatical errors. Your proof readers & editors are not doing their jobs.

BigrimmstalesTooBigrimmstalesTooalmost 5 years ago
The case of the judicious editor

Picking up on another comment here, if you don't have one I'd suggest you get an editor. There were some off-putting grammatical errors and a lot of repetition of the plot but in the hands of different horny 18 year olds. A secret is something you only share with one other person. There's a lot holding on to this secret.

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