All Comments on 'Breakdown'

What a lovely, sweet story. Reading and editing this story was a pleasure. Can't wait for more of this story, if you choose to write it.

I can't wait to read the rest.

When they continue to get together -- and they move toward making love --please give this sexy Rain a hairy chest for Tabora to cuddle against. He is a real gentleman and a real catch for her!

Interesting characters - good dialogue - love in the air.

What's not to like.

More please

from the hit factory.

Can't wait for chapter two. Maybe it'll be a travel adventure story?

The beginning of another absorbing story by this talented writer. As only expected from this author. Bravos.

Great storyline, characters and dialogue. More please!

You built some beautiful characters and the dialog pulled me in. The storyline is wonderful, and you even inserted some accurate 1970's car stuff. It's as if you wrote this just for me.

The protector in me wants Joey hurt. I want him to hurt badly. Really badly.

5 stars, and 100's of hearts! Thank you for sharing your gift.

a very touching, romantic and delightful story. Thanks for everything you do for us readers... and writers. You are the best.

I know there's more to come, but this could very well stand on it's own.

Great to see you writing again!! Can't wait to see the next chapter.

A beautiful romance blossoming. Looking forward to chapter two.

I always know it's going to be a great ride. Looking for the finish. RPL

That was a truly sweet story! Got me right in the feels! ;)

Looking forward to chapter two!

which made me feel cold with your very well described blizzard.

Waiting for part 2.

Looking forward to the second part, wondering which way this was going to go.

The story just dragged me along for the ride. A very good addition to your other stories.

Looking forward to part two

I don’t know if I could say any more than that, so I will just repeat it. Wow!!!

Was going through Randi withdrawal and this is a great fix.

This story is so, Randi.

Loved the seventies timeline. A lot of memories stirred from my youth.

Great cars, music and no cell phones.

A lovely start to a romance. Love the start of this story and can't wait to read more!

You know Las Cruces too well to be a stranger. I moved here in 2006 and retired in 2016. My favorite restaurant is El Sombrero and my best friend, Casper, and I are there almost every Thursday at the same table. A couple of old farts relaxing and enjoying life. You are one of my favorite authors here. Keep up the good work as you are really appreciated.

Adorable, irresistible, endearing little girls. Known to warm the heart and provoke unsolicited smiles.

Great start. Guessing Joey’s gotta reenter the story.

I look forward to more. Many thanks.

Am so looking forward to see where you take this!

You write these kind of stories so well Can’t wait for the next chapter. thanks

Not just because of the stories, either. She's in the top five percent of writers on the site, but it's bringing readers like me these great stories other than her own that makes me love her. Not only does she write and bring us other stories, she edits for half the great writers around. I have trouble believing that one woman can do all the things she does. Thanks blackrandl.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

You always rise to the occasion. What a lovely start to a promising love story. Can’t wait to read more. Doctime

That's a good thing. Full of deep emotion, and love of humanity. Full of people who wear their emotions on their sleeves. Great story.

Chasing Randi all the way over to Romance to find this and damned glad I did. I truly love this writing and the story. Thank you for the event. Everything I have read, I have loved. Best of Lit by a.mile. Thanks.

Great start of a story can't wait till the next chapter

Thank you randi for putting this event together for us readers. The romances are my favorite stories on this site, and to have the best writers on this site all writing romances at the same time, is like an early Xmas present.

Can’t wait to read the rest of this story, it’s off to a great start,

Thanks again, and happy holidays.

K.S.

The conclusion is in edit and I will post as soon as I get it back. Randi.

Outstanding writing. Thank you very much.

You make it seem so easy.

You are a force of nature.

Hooked

You really know how to wring the emotions out of a story. Great!

I had seen the many kudos that other authors included in their forewords and was impressed at how many of them you had helped. Recently, I found some of your work and then clicked on your list of stories.

You work is well done, with good writing and great themes. I read mostly "loving wives" for some reason even though I have been with my wife for 59 years with no thoughts of straying myself and no worries over my wife's fidelity. She was a teacher and one of the "hottest" in the schools she taught in, but I am confident that she didn't even flirt -- but was well thought of by all her peers, elected as teachers' union representative and teacher of the year too many years to count.

Your stories make me feel good that there are other romantic couples out there that have found the love of their life and avoid most of the trials and tribulations that are the subject of "loving wives". I need to switch to romance after I finish reading all of your stories.

THANK YOU again -- I hope that your life is wonderful and I look forward to reading more of your work. I am Anonymous because I cannot remember my "member" information but I feel like you are a friend. I have written thousands of technical and business projects but am in awe of those of you who can write good fiction.

Best regards, wally@torchlake.com

I just have to say that I really enjoyed this story. I guess I have a weakness for a story that has someone down-on-thier-luck meeting someone that is truly a good person...and then throw in a cute young child and I am sold on the story.

Thank you for a beautiful start of a beautiful tale.

👍

Your stories are all well crafted but this is you at your best. It has been a pleasure to read.

Typical Blackrandi. Thank you.5*s. Love the tiny Angel.

I thought I found a mistake in one of your stories, but of course as it turned out I was wrong. There wasn't a real timeline given in the story, but you had her driving a Ford Fairlane that was around ten years old with a generator instead of an alternator. That would have made the Fairlane at least a couple of years older than my '67 Mustang as Ford didn't switch to alternators till around '64-'65. Then you threw in "This was a cover of the new Carol King song, "So Far Away." That 'new' song came out the year I graduated, making this story circa 1961. I can understand Tabora wanting somewhere warmer than Saginaw, she should be used to blizzards as it's not like back in Michigan we didn't have snow. At least she wasn't leaving Flint, I think you can still drink the water in Saginaw. Don't think anyone ever wrote a hit song about Flint either. Great story as usual Randi, now we just have to see about Joey since we already know where the love story is going. I'm beginning to think you really are a car lady. Signed: BTW

Per Wikipedia: “So Far Away” is a song written by Carole King, which appeared on her 1971 album Tapestry. Yer a decade off.

For those of you trying to figure out what year this story occurred just go back to the first paragraph or two to see he bought a new 1970 Dodge and after a few months he was at the dealership getting the oil changed when he met Tabora & Malley! Also the song, So Far Away, was released on Carol King's Tapestry album in 1971 and rose to #4 in the contemporary charts.

Great story Randi....just like all your others!

Nice beginning.

I love the way you write, Randi! Headed over to read the conclusion.

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ I’ll say no more

Great Story so far .

Thanks for setting the date correctly, my reference to 1961 was a typo that I can't believe I missed, I graduated in 1971, the year her song came out. The hit song I hinted at was Lefty Frizzell's last number one; 'Saginaw, Michigan'. The only thing in the story that I might have changed would have had Three Dog Night's 'Joy To The World' playing on the radio in the truck instead of 'One Man Band' which also came out that year. Then again maybe that would have been too obvious.

Randi, I'm going out on a limb here, Tabora is dark skinned as is Malley. Barrett is redheaded with no mention that I saw about Rain other than his large size. Don't suppose he is too with any veiled comparisons? One of the fun things about your stories beyond the impeccable writing is discovering what names you come up with for your characters. Thanks again. Signed: BTW

Great read so far

You have quite a way with word and with a story line. The story is credible and you draw the reader into it in a very sexy way. We participate in the development of the characters. Thx

BJ

Mother great work!

Can't wait for the next chapter.

5*

read it several times love it 5 stars

What a marvelous story. I love the characters. The dialog is enthralling. Bravo!

loved it such a feel of love between all of them

Wonderful story and I can't wait for part 2.

I could almost hear Malleys little voice. Excellent work.

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Anudder top shelf story!

11/10 Malleys!!!!!

excellent

Beautiful story, when I first read this story, I missed the part about B&W, I always thought it was media hype, until my best mate started dating an African lady, on a trip to London, the scowls they got, saddened me.

Love your work xx

Second reading and I am still very impressed. Two set of five stars end to end.

BJ

Great story -well told!

Nice! Five big ones.

Very good story, Randi! Definitely a 5 star tale.

WONDERFUL STORY, 10 stars aren't even close! You are in a class by yourself, Randi, and I believe Rain is going to have a eife and daughter!

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