All Comments on 'Breakfast in Bed'

Hot!

This is exactly me and my love... I've always wondered what motivates him.. you've captured it perfectly. You are a wordsmith. Thank you... I hope to see more. X

Wordsmith? I think not, dude, get an editor.

Pretty good piece of romantic erotica. Well done for your first post.

Sure, there are some issues about editing, but not enough to worry those that approve stories or detract from the emotion and narrative.

Look forward to your next story.

You have a good start for a hot story here, but quite honestly it reads like an operative report. There's no emotion, no feedback. I hate "oh baby oh" stories, but this tale could use at least ONE of those. How did you feel, doing unto her? How did she respond to you? Was there squirming and moaning? Scents in the air, sounds in the room, shadows? Paint a picture so the reader feels like they are you, not a disembodied, unengaged observer.

I appreciate this feedback. Some information I can definitely use. Thank you.

There will always be good and bad criticism, but it was an enjoyable read. Thanks!

Very well written! A fantastic way to greet the day! very hot!

Very sensual. Hmmmmm loved it!

Very descriptive and easy read! Could easily relate to the characters and kept my interest! Looking forward to more

Hot. Made me wet.

A very hot, very descriptive story. I may want to avoid the parentheses, as they are unnecessary.

Keep writing!

Did you let Lovecraft write this? Is this an alt?

Nice beggining. I know it's years, but...was so nice to read. Thank you and congratulations if it was inspired from your life. Bring some more of this, dear.

gmihalka

loving my wifes pussy after filling it with cum is our favorite activity and when she knows it is going to happen gives her the most earth shattering climaxes. by the end I thought someone was watching and documenting our lovemaking! very nice!