All Comments on 'Breaking Point'

Damn, she's tall!

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You do realized the order is not what matters but the symbols, right? According to this, she's eleven feet and five inches tall.

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Yeah, it's a typo, but, whoa, it's a big one.

Good story.

This thing is filled with run-on sentences. This is a good example. You wrote it as one sentence. After a quick edit, it's five.

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David moved towards her instinctively, he grabbed both her shoulders, surprising her again, he lifted her up and spun, her blond hair whipping around, she wrapped her legs around him as he pushed her against the wall, he pressed his whole body into her.

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David moved towards her. Instinctively, he grabbed both her shoulders. Surprising her again, he lifted her up and spun, her blond hair whipping around. She wrapped her legs around him as he pushed her against the wall. He pressed his whole body into her.

I liked this story... That inbred moron anonymous needs to go back in the corner and play with his/her self.... If he/she is so smart where are your stories moron... For some reason I cannot get signed on here but will leave my email in case mr./ms moron has anything intelligent to say... go play with yourself!!!!!

dukeofearl@gmx.com Hit me inbred moron

Great story, I loved it!!